I like this character, but it does feel rushed which isn't his fault. They need to give him a longer segment to give some exposition. Why is he "cosmic" why his fascination with universe. It can be silly or corny, that's fine. But the viewers only have a tiny picture of the character "he hisses, and uses space terms to symbolize ring/belt/opponents..." OK we got that , but they've forgot to give us the "why?" And "what for".
I'm not good at writing. I wish I was, I've always wanted to try my hand at short stories, but I when it comes to the detailed grammar rules like dangling participles and ending with prepositional phrases I tend to suck.
But I remember basic character development from freshmen college English and when fleshing out a character for the reader there's countless ways, and orders to do it, but you need to give the reader the 4 W's.
Who? What? Why? and Why Not?
Nice concise explanation on the 4 W's of character development: https://shannoncurtis.wordpress.com/2013/11/04/writing-101-four-ws-for-character-development/
So far WWE has given the Who, definitely the Why Not, and a little bit of Why during the Neville feud and the dropped Golddust feud. But they've never given the What.
Many WWE characters suffer this problem and if you pay close attention. Characters with all 4 W's defined, even if defined very poorly are the ones more over with casuals and the older crew.
But the characters that flop, or no one cares are missing 1 or more W's if character development.
I'm not good at writing. I wish I was, I've always wanted to try my hand at short stories, but I when it comes to the detailed grammar rules like dangling participles and ending with prepositional phrases I tend to suck.
But I remember basic character development from freshmen college English and when fleshing out a character for the reader there's countless ways, and orders to do it, but you need to give the reader the 4 W's.
Who? What? Why? and Why Not?
Nice concise explanation on the 4 W's of character development: https://shannoncurtis.wordpress.com/2013/11/04/writing-101-four-ws-for-character-development/
So far WWE has given the Who, definitely the Why Not, and a little bit of Why during the Neville feud and the dropped Golddust feud. But they've never given the What.
Many WWE characters suffer this problem and if you pay close attention. Characters with all 4 W's defined, even if defined very poorly are the ones more over with casuals and the older crew.
But the characters that flop, or no one cares are missing 1 or more W's if character development.
