I just couldn't imagine Edge saying that.And personally deep inside and I have no problem telling you this, but I think you’re a NO GOOD PIECE OF SHIT!
I think you meant Orton dropped to the mat and rolled outside. I know you might think "its one little mistake", but it definitely effects what the reader thinks of your skills.Edge goes to catch Orton off the ropes with the spear but Edge quickly drops to the mat and rolls to the outside.
-I don't know what everyone else thought but I really liked the opening for the Kennedy interview! Once again you immediately establish character, which is a good thing. On the downside, you take no notice of spelling and grammar. Here's a sample of what you should try and do (note - take notice of the red exclamation marks in the quote above; they are where I think you can or need to correct yourself):Two weeks ago I advised you to go to the nerd convention with your fellow spotty geeks who have yet to go through puberty !(like yourself) - unnecessary, and !(your) - spelling mistake still here ruining my reputation by just !(standing) - no emotion next to me.!(wrong punctuation) Now get the hell out of my sight before I slap the yellow off your teeth.!(wrong punctuation)
Hopefully you understand what I am trying to get at and you improve for next time. There are more mistakes but I feel I've made my point. Anyway back to the interview: a great segment from Kennedy and Carlito:Two weeks ago I advised you to go to the nerd convention with your fellow spotty geeks who have yet to go through puberty, and you're still here ruining my reputation by just STANDING next to me! Now get the hell out of my sight before I slap the yellow off your teeth!
lets speak so the………Chain gang can understand me. Yo man take a peek at this yo, I’m here pimpin my ride thinking I am black yo. I’m here representing the US of A dawg. Worrrrrrrrrrrrrrrddddddd for hizzile for shizzle. Now where the hell did you pick up that accent Mobile Alabama that’s what I want to know?
If he is a wrestling God, Adolf Hitler was a nice guy.
-All great quotes; I think you are a very good booker when it comes to the Quality/Entertainment factor. 9/10If you spit that in your face I will take the rest of that apple and stick it so far up your ass you will see it popping out of that fungus on your head.
Your wrestlers are in absolute character and it is very enjoyable to read your show. Just one thing:How dare the man get involved in my business, a Wrestling Gods business and gets his twenty inch nose in my way costing me a title. That man does not deserve to be standing in the same country as me let alone the same ring as me. Pinocchio you might of cost me the US Title but let’s just say payback is a bitch.
Don't copy things that have been said before unless they are a catchphrase which is said all the time e.g. "I am a Wrestling God".I smelt like smoke son because I went through fire.