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Write a better raw than this weeks!

This could be a game of sorts if it gets any popular.


The idea is to write a 6 segment script of RAW, and every user gets 1 segment with a 30 minute time frame, including commercials. Once the last segment is written out, we can start anew. Example, you're writing segment 6. The next user after you would have to start over with a new script.

It would be interesting to compile the whole show at the end of the six segments to see what kind of show we can put together by each user contributing a segment. It might be a wacky show, or it might be a show you think was going good but completely falls off the rails. Feel free to be as serious or as ridiculous as you can. The more variety this has will be the key to its longevity. Im not trying to start a revolution here, but i think this would be pretty cool, so just hear me out.


Now naturally some Segments are going to bleed into other segments, and thats alright. Say if you started a match with two Upper carders 20 minutes into the 3rd segment (which would be (about 9:20 if you live where im at. ) then you know with the entrances and all that they might need a little more time. The next person can pick up where you left off and finish the match.


Now keep in mind these are stand alone scripts (with all six segments counting as 1 script) and no script should have to do with another script. There's no picking up where the last script fell off after segment 6 because that show never was. It never existed.


Dont be deterred, there is a goal here. The main point here is not not write a random script, but is to collectively write a better script that the monday night raw of the current week.


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Segment 1. Show starts off by commentators announcing Evil General Manager books Big E vs Ricardo Rodriguez singles match with the stipulation that if Ricardo wins, Alberto can choose the stipulation for Extreme Rules. (see, this is why we need big johnny right here.) They play the big and clumsy game where E is dominating the match but is kind of slow. Big E Sells only about twice, but when he gets clumsy Ricardo hits Enzuigiri out of no where and attempts to go off the top rope when Langston catches him. This is where Alberto Runs in to save his pal before he can eat the dudes finisher. (this segment is designed to get Del Rio over by saving his friend before it had gone too far.) Alberto ultimately is the one to take his move after a brawl, involving Ricardo giving Del Rio a chair to defend himself. Del Rio starts to get the upper hand in the brawl with Big E when big E out of no where runs him over like a train. Then Del Rio gets the Big Ending. While Berty is on the ground, Zigglypuff comes in the the ring and does his signature hair taunt and was super effective! The Crowd is going wild and cramming at the doors to buy this next PPV because they want to see Del Rio get his revenge and win the title. Segment also gets Ziggler over because fans(casuals) want to see him get his ass kicked because he didn't even do anything and had his big homie do all the dirtywork.



Entrances: 4:00

Actual match time 5:42

Run in by Del Rio: 4:39

go to commercial. 400

Prime Time Players vs. Justin Gabriel and Zack Ryder. PTP win. match with entrances 9.25

Commercials 3:00

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Ricardo hits Enzuigiri out of no where

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Okay I'm starting to like this.

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Thing about this forum is that if 'your' guy is failing and has become boring then it is creatives fault but when it is someone you don't like then it is the wrestlers fault. There is a lack of consistency on this forum.
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I'm not sure if poor Alberto could do anything at this point to get the crowd on his side, the guy is just not over. Anyway one thing I'd change is how strong Big E comes off looking, or rather how weak Del Rio looks by ultimately losing the brawl to Big E. Change it to where Big E and Alberto brawl for a couple of minutes and just before Alberto gets the upper hand and finishes of E then Ziggler comes in and takes him out. That way both guys involved in the brawl come out looking strong and Ziggler still gets to get his shot in like a proper heel should, after somebody else has already done all the hard work.

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I'm not sure if poor Alberto could do anything at this point to get the crowd on his side, the guy is just not over. Anyway one thing I'd change is how strong Big E comes off looking, or rather how weak Del Rio looks by ultimately losing the brawl to Big E. Change it to where Big E and Alberto brawl for a couple of minutes and just before Alberto gets the upper hand and finishes of E then Ziggler comes in and takes him out. That way both guys involved in the brawl come out looking strong and Ziggler still gets to get his shot in like a proper heel should, after somebody else has already done all the hard work.

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You're suppose to make segment 2 not complain and change MY segment :langston
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You're suppose to make segment 2 not complain and change MY segment :langston
I thought complaining was sort of our thing around here?

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Segment 2:

Bricki comes out to announce that there will be two matches tonight to determine #1 contendership for the US title. The winners of each match this Raw will face each other the next week on Raw, whoever wins that match will take on Cesaro to determine #1 contender. The first match is up

Santino Marella v. R-truth - Truth goes over

Match - 5-6 min
Commercial break, etc. - 5 min maybe?
Wow, was going through the roster, there is no one I would really want to see in a match



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You're suppose to make segment 2 not complain and change MY segment :langston
Lol now now, don't expect too much from everyone ....I'm sure they were just giving pointers. But I think your segment was well done. This is what I would do for the divas, feel free to make it any segment you like if you enjoy it =):

Divas Champion Kaitlyn's music hits as she comes down to the ring ready to compete against her new opponent with the Divas Championship. Natalya comes down to the ring to her music looking very excited to face the divas champion for the first time in awhile. Just before the bell is rung, AJ's music hits, she skips down the ring and keeps skipping around the ring as the bell rings.
Natalya and Kaitlyn begin the match as AJ continues to skip around the ring. As the match continues on AJ jumps up on the ring trying to get in as the ref tells her to get down. Kaitlyn is distracted and Natalya pulls her hair to lay her flat on the mat not caring that its her friend, she wants a shot for the divas title as much as AJ does. Natalya goes for the sharpshooter just as AJ gets down from the ring, looking pleased that her distraction seemed to have cost Kaitlyn the match. As Natalya goes for the sharpshooter Kaitlyn rolls her up 1,2,3.

AJ is smiling in a very psychotic way as Kaitlyn holds the Divas championship up for everyone to see. She locks eyes with AJ looking like she is hoping AJ will come into the ring so Kaitlyn can take her down, just then AJ signals her hands making it look like the divas title is around her waist and then skips up the ramp in a happy but psychotic fashion.

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Second part of the #1 contenders match. We see Justin Gabriel in the ring waiting for his opponent. Suddenly a returning Evan Bourne appears on stage. Bell rings, Gabriel and Bourne have an exciting, high flying match. I'll give this one a little more time, maybe 6-7 minutes. Bourne advances to face Santino next week on Raw
Decent set of matches I suppose, plus it helps to make the title scene a little more interesting, make it seem like getting a shot at a title a little tougher to obtain



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Decent set of matches I suppose, plus it helps to make the title scene a little more interesting, make it seem like getting a shot at a title a little tougher to obtain
That's my first time writing a match, so I hope I didn't do too terribly lol. I would have a ball writing the AJ/Kaitlyn feud.
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