Don't really think Cena said enough before Punk came out, and the ending of last week's show needed addressing here. And whether or not PG has been ditched here (which I assume it has) I just can't picture Cena saying "motherfucker" to Punk. Punk's dialogue sounded mostly alright, but yeah, I would have thought Cena would have serious matters to address after last week instead of making jokes. The end product of this promo was intriguing though, with Punk and Cena against the entire roster. Should make them look pretty strong going into what I assume will be their match at MITB if they win, which I'm assuming they will.
Recap for Swagger/Khali was alright, but Swagger making Khali TAP OUT? Can't really see it. Seeing as Swagger's opponent didn't need to be Khali, I think you should have chosen a different guy to have Swagger go over. Swagger's post-match interview was alright, didn't sound like much of a heel though, unless you're turning him face in which case it did its job.
Heyman's promo was too short in my opinion, I think there was a lot more that could have been said about the situation. Barrett as a face should be interesting, but overall, yeah, another promo that should have been longer. No surprises in Axel retaining, not sure what happens now that Axel/Barrett has come and gone just like that. Maybe you could have built it up for MITB.
Another short promo here, although I wouldn't want to sit through Del Rio talking for too long. Hoping that something noteworthy happens after ToF/Del Rio & Rodriguez, and it's not just filler.
Having one guy from a tag team face a guy from another team is always a solid choice for furthering a feud, and Orton going over was the right choice to give the challengers some momentum.
No gripes with the Sheamus interview, effective buildup for the tag team match later tonight, and his issues with Big Show needed to be addressed, which they were.
No surprise that Ryan went over Camacho, little confused by how you're booking Ryan, Zeke and Langston, and whether they're faces or not. Didn't seem like it on the last Raw.
Decent interview with Christian and Jericho, would have expected some tension between them after Jericho's comment about becoming champion again, seeing as Christian said just before that he had the WHC in his sights too.
Good buildup for the 5 man match on SD here, had to have Swagger involved here in some capacity, although surely if he attacked Christian it should be a DQ victory for Christian and Jericho? Oh well.
I was thinking maybe Bryan/Rollins would be saved for SD or the next Raw seeing as Orton/Reigns with their partners at ringside was sufficient buildup for the feud for this show IMO. I would have had Rollins go over to keep it even between the two, but Reigns AND Rollins being beaten tonight makes them look pretty weak.
No idea why you had to have Del Rio intentionally lose the match like that, even with his reasoning after the match. Not really how a World Champion should be booked, came out of it looking pretty weak.
Another Shield member losing. Not really feeling how you're booking these guys, even if it was against Henry. Maybe you should have just had Ambrose go over someone and then have Henry come out afterwards. Should be an interesting feud, obviously outside interference will be needed for Ambrose to go over Henry whenever they face each other.
Not sure about Punk getting a "big pop" seeing as he's a heel and he didn't endear himself to anyone on the last Raw with what he did to Cena. ANOTHER DQ finish? Jesus. Don't understand how it was a DQ finish if everyone was brawling amongst themselves. Pretty messy here. At least you got some more Punk/Cena build in there afterwards, although I think Cena really needs to one-up Punk on the next show they appear together in.
Overall, a lot to work on here. I think your promos need to be longer and the characterization is off in places e.g. Cena's promo at the start, and all of the DQs were unnecessary, but keep going and I'll keep reading. Plus, your descriptions are hilarious, e.g. "Punk breathing heavy as fuck!!!!" If you could check out my TNA thread, that would be great.