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post #1 of 5 (permalink) Old 07-24-2012, 03:52 AM Thread Starter
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WWE FEB 2012- Shane Mcmahon runs the Company.

The year is 2012, and Vince Mcmahon has a heart attack. He passes away, and he leaves his shares of the WWE, to Shane Mcmahon. Stephanie, in grief, gives her shares to Shane, who now reluctantly quits his job as CEO of YOU network. He also quits at the International Sports Management Board of Director's job. He takes over the job. Linda is, as she says, "too old to run the company". Shane is the only one that can run the company now. Shane decides in his first move to remove make NXT a new Camp, to train people how the WWE works. This camp focuses on the ring work, less on charisma. FCW grads will now go to NXT for finishing polish. Superstars will now be live on Fridays. Shane has 3 goals.
1 Cut down on roster space
2 Get Money
3 Expand farther

Alberto Del Rio
Alicia Fox
Beth Pheonix
Brodus Clay
Chris Jericho
CM Punk
Cody Rhodes
Curt Hawkins
Daniel Bryan
Darren Young
David Otunga
Derrick Bateman
Dolph Ziggler
Drew Mcentire
Evan Bourne
Ezekiel Jackson
Heath Slater
Jack Swagger
Jey Uso
Jimmy Uso
Jinder Mahal
John Cena
Johnny Curtis
Justin Gabriel
Kelly Kelly
Kofi Kingston
Mark Henry
Mason Ryan
Michael Mcgillicutty
Nikki Bella
Percy Watson
Randy Orton
Rey Misterio
Ricardo Rodriguez
Rosa Mendes
Santino Marella
Sin Cara
Skip Sheffield
Ted Dibiase
The Big Show
The Great Khali
The Miz
The Undertaker
Titus O'Neil
Trent Baretta
Tyler Reks
Tyson Kidd
Wade Barrett
Yoshi Tatsu
Zach Ryder
Tag Teams
Vickie's Stable (Swagger, Ziggler V. Guerrero)
Air Boom (Evan Bourne Kofi Kingston)
Epico and Primo
Hawkins and Reks
Hunico and Camacho
The Bella Twins
The Diva's of Doom (Beth Phoenix and Natalya)
The Usos (Jimmy and Jey Uso)

Sorry about no photos. I struggle with photos for some reason. But, other than roster, There will be photos.
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Re: WWE FEB 2012- Shane Mcmahon runs the Company.

I assume you'll be writing RAW, Smackdown, and Superstars? Or did I misunderstand? Either way, you're off to a solid start. Opening post could do with a little more work as far as presentation goes (color coding, etc.) But I see what you're trying to do here and that's what matters most. You've got quite a list of talent to work with here, adding the FCW guys on... so I expect that you'll utilize them (it'll be a breath of fresh air to see new faces on "TV". Your introduction was very straightforward and to the point... and I see that you've listed Shane's goals off the bat as well. I don't think he'll have too much trouble 'getting money'... but as far as expanding further and shaving down the roster, I look forward to seeing how you go about it. Good luck with your thread here, buddy... and I'm sure some other people will have more notes for you later.

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Re: WWE FEB 2012- Shane Mcmahon runs the Company.

Wrestling Insider:
by Dave Meltzer

We have info on a "cool" signing. It is unknown who this man is, but chances are is that promos will be coming soon.

Also,Superstars has been cancelled permanently. Sorry Jinder Mahal, find another place to wrestle in the WWE.

Also, there will be a fireing at the next Raw, but it is unknown who it is. All I know is, is that the person will actually get fired.
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Re: WWE FEB 2012- Shane Mcmahon runs the Company.

A month Passes, and now it is Feburary 2012.

opening pyro

Cole: Welcome to Monday Night Raw!

Lawler: Tonight is going to be special, because Shane McMahon is going to introduce the new GM of Raw! Also, says he is going to fire someone by the end of the night.

Cole: Also, we have a MAJOR singles match between CM Punk, and Chris Jericho. They have a bet to see who would win!

*Here comes the money plays*

Shane McMahon: Well, later tonight, there will be a firing just like my father did. Trust me, you guys will love it. Michael Cole, may you please come down to the ring, along with my "friend".

*Land of Five Rivers plays*

Shane: Cole, you, will have your job on the line vs the Great Khali in a loser gets fired match. Also, if someone interferes, the person who attacks the competor along with BOTH of you are fired. So, have.....

Cole: Wait, is there anything I can..

Shane: Yes one thing, and that is SHUT THE HELL UP!
*Here Comes the Money*
Pictures of beaches.
Voice-distorted- "The beach. That is the coolest place on Earth, but, I know cooler." (They are coming back)

*I came To Play*
The Miz does his entrance, but a video of Shane McMahon goes on up,

Shane: Miz, I decided to make your match, a 3 man tag team match. Come on out, Ziggler and Swagger.

*Perfection comes on*

Shane: But, who are you versing, well, only some people. Come on out boys!

*Roddy Piper's music blares, than soon Rickie Steamboat, followed by his son, Richie*

Shane: Richie, welcome to the limelight. Good Luck!
At the start, The Miz had the place all under control, kicking Roddy Piper around quickly. Soon, and eye gouge and a jab punch later, he tags out to Richie, while The Miz tags out to Dolph, who is quickly arm dragged. Richie gets the upper hand, and when he gets to the top rope, Swagger pulls him down to the apron and then is Swagger Bombed, from the apron to the ground. Swagger rolls him back in, but Richie kicks out. Ziggler goes for the zig zag, but is instead put on Richie's shoulders. Richie puts him down, irish whips him, and then wins with a sleeper of his own!

(Winner by Submission at 10:07- Richie Steamboat)

*Call My Mama goes on*

*One Man Rock Band goes on*
Can someone yell squash. Swiftly finished off in about 3 minutes.
Winner by pin, Broadus Clay
He did his dance for the fans, and then a promo shot on the Titantron, ruining his dance
"Broadus Clay, what happened to you! You are dancing! That is our job!"
Broadus, being slightly angry, takes a microphone, and says, "Who are you?
The Titantron, goes out, as do the arena lights. Too Cool w/ Rikishi come out and GrandMaster Sexay says "At Capital Punishment, find two wrestlers, and us three, vs you and two others." The crowd goes crazy, but before they leave, RIkishi whips Broadus to a corner, sits him down, and to the delight of the fans, give Broadus a stinkface.
*Michael Cole's theme song, Whatever it is*
*The land of Five Rivers*

Actually, The Great Khali quickly gave Michael Cole a Punjabi Plunge, but Jim Ross's theme goes on, and Michael Cole go to the entrance Ramp where JR is sitting. They go to beat up JR, but the count goes to 10, they are both FIRED!
Draw by Double Count Out

*Here Comes The Money*

"Hello, The Great Khali, Michael Cole, you are both FIIIRRRREEEDDD! JR did nothing to interfere with the match. He was watching. Simple as that. So, get out of the building, you two. LLEEAAVVEE!! Security!"

*My Time Is Now*
*Whoa Hey*


Mark Henry had this match before it was even started. The Royal Rumble winner Henry kicked Cena's butt. Cena decided to quickly turn into Super Cena until ADR came out with his ring announcer and started to attack Cena. The Ref called the match. Cena was torn apart, and was W-S-Slamed through the Announce Table.
(Winner By DQ- John Cena)

Main Event
CM Punk VS Chris Jericho!

CM Punk was on a roll. He had the upper hand, and he even did his top rope elbow drop. Punk soon was Rolled up, but kicked out quickly. Jericho soon went for the LionSault, but missed. Then, CM punk Corner whipped Jericho, hitting the High Knee. Then, he put on the Anaconda Vice, but Chris got to the ropes. Jericho Hit the Codebreaker, and then put in the real Walls Of Jericho! Not the Boston Crab kind, the original kind. But then, Randy Orton runs in, RKO's Jericho! Also, he punts CM Punk for good measure. Chaos breaks out in the ring, as Sheamus comes out and a brawl just starts to happen, when Shane McMahon comes out.

Shane: Wait up! You guys want to know your new, Raw, GM? Well, let me just say, Me and this guy will be co- running Raw. This guy is.......
*Sexy Boy* (Huge Pop)
Shane: HBK!!
HBK: Ha! As my first order of Raw GM, At Capital Punishment, for the WWE Championship, it will be Randy Orton, Sheamus, Chris Jericho, CM Punk, and 2 personal people that are Zach Ryder, (loud pop) and The Game! Triple H! These six people will be in a Tables elimination match. Good Luck!

Welcome to the Funhouse of Shane McMahon.
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Re: WWE FEB 2012- Shane Mcmahon runs the Company.

Okay, you have some very good ideas... I'll give you that, but i have to dig deeper and pick this show apart.

First and foremost; Presentation. Presentation. Presentation. You really need to take the time out to do it. Take a look at some of the other shows and come up with your own style of color coding, alignment, etc. Without it, the show not only looks bland, but it furthers a 'rushed' feeling, and nobody likes a rushed show. You would be surprised, a little effort put into presentation can go a long way. The same goes for your news report. I say this CONSTRUCTIVELY -- not to be a jerk -- but the text of the show you've posted comes off as very boring, making it easy for anyone to just click out of the thread without giving it second thought. Work on that in the future. OH! Very important: Don't overdo it, just find a perfect medium that satisfies you.

Next, you could do with a little more description in your promos. Not to say that you should write out every time a character breathes while speaking, but helping people to visualize what's happening helps alot in making a written promo more than just a dialogue. I will say this though, not that you did MUCH... but the characters you did use to speak, you've done a solid job of capturing their actual personalities. Mainly Shane McMahon, I never questioned whether or not he would say any of the things that he did, and that's a good start.

Furthermore, everything looks a bit bunched up and thrown together, but that just goes right back to presentation. You should really take this note since it's come up so much, haha. Work on spacing things out a little better, like your music cues, dialogue, and the way you layout your recaps. Also, choose if you're going to recap a show PROFESSIONALLY or in manuscript fashion... meaning, if you're recapping the show as if it actually happened, stick to a time tense that fits, and avoid saying things like "Can someone yell squash." If you're going to do things like that, present your recaps in more of a personal review sort of way, do you understand?

Lastly, don't rush your shows man. Like I said before, you have some solid ideas, it seems but they'll never come across or get noticed if you rush your shows. Take your time, use a little more description, and for the love of all things BTB, never EVER say "Michael Cole's theme song, Whatever that is". Do a little research, find out IF he has one, and what it's called. There were a few instances where the theme names were either wrong or it seemed like you just didn't care to do the research.

I'll state again, you do have a MIND for booking... but it all boils down to the way you PRESENT your ideas. If the presentation isn't appealing and if you don't take the time out to actually write your shows instead of throwing together, nobody else here will notice. Understand? Hope to see you get better in the future. Don't give up! Just take the notes you've been given -- pick which ones you think will help -- and run with it. We all started somewhere -- it's where we end up that matters. Good luck!

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