Nice to see another 2004 btb, hope you do well in this. Btw Johnny Stamboli, Edge were on Smackdown so if you have them on Raw, you should have explained it in the backstory. I see that you have a created wrestler on Smackdown...Haven’t seen this before. I don’t think you need the new wrestling year in the tag line. For the preview it would be fine. You really need to get rid of the Raw preview graphic, just google some pics and find a good one.
Ok lets get to the review. Benoit’s promo started off well until i read this:
Chris Benoit: Hunter what do you want I made you tap out last night now go back into the lockeroom and wait your turn.
I don’t think he would say that. HHH would probably talk a bit first and then Benoit would cut him off and then says he made him tap. Going back to the locker room line and wait your turn is kinda strange.
Why would Batista suddenly be named as a #1 contender? He was not in title contention during that time and if anyone from Evolution could have had that spot then it would probably be Flair or Orton. Christian was also in a better position than Batista as well so you could have had Christian or Jericho in the #1 contender match.
Jeff Hardy wasn’t a part of the WWE in 2004. Jeff Hardy’s return is completely strange booking here. He wasn’t featured at WM20, but here you have him warming up backstage. If he’s returned, you need to state he’s returned. At the start of your thread you explained the situation with Rock, Austin, Lesnar and Goldberg which is good. However you should also also mentioned that William Regal has returned. Regal was not back until April but it’s not a problem if you bring him back early. However you should have stated that he’s back from injury. It just seemed as nothing happened to him and he’s been wrestling the whole time.
Matt Hardy was also a heel during that time period so there is no backstory into how he turned face or how he suddenly reunited with his brother Jeff. Or is Jeff a heel, or are The Dudleys heel(who were faces in March 2004) because D-Von levelled Matt with a chair, i’m confused??
I don’t mind if people do recaps of the match endings so i don’t mind if you didn’t write out the full match. Ok on to the first match just seems weird how you put ending- Jeff hardy makes the tag. Could have layed it out a bit better.
Rock’s promo doesn’t really sound like Rock but i see that you’re trying to continue the Evolution vs Rock & Sock feud. Rock/Flair for Backlash is a good idea.
Jericho/Christian segment could have been done better, with Christian getting a few more words in.
Would love to talk to you Jericho but I’m afraid I have better things to be doing, Cya!!!
That just sounds odd, you should have had Trish explain why she betrayed Jericho at WrestleMania.
Now that Booker beat Batista, shouldn’t he be in the number one contenders match instead of Batista? Then again Booker is in a tag match at Backlash. JR’s last comment to finish off raw seemed strange.
Overall i was confused with some of the booking.
As you said you couldn’t write in full as you were busy but as it’s your first show you really need to work on a lot of stuff such as grammar, layout, explanation for how a star returned/moved brand etc. Just give a bit more detail in matches/segments. For commentary from JR & Lawler, try to make it seem realistic. Sorry if i sounded harsh but that’s only to help you improve your shows so work on Smackdown and it should turn out to be a good show and a fun read. I really enjoy reading threads of this time period so please make this work.
[CENTER]Chris Benoit vs. Shawn Michaels OR Kane OR Randy Orton
Eric Bischoff: I’m not done, next week we shall have a Triple threat featuring Kane….Batista…. And SHAWN MICHAELS!!! To determine the #1 Contender for Backlash!
World Heavyweight Championship:
I was very confused here. In the review you have Batista in the #1 contenders match next week but then for your Backlash card you have Orton listed instead of Batista???
I think Kane will become the #1 contender. HBK/HHH are likely to end their feud at Backlash.