Wheelman for James Ellsworth
Join Date: Jun 2008
Re: Melvisboy's WWE: The Comeback
Haven't stopped by in a while, but I've still been reading intently. First of all, great banners, so props to you or whoever makes them. Wow, great video package. Not only was the style (having it infused with commentary) unique but it also gave me a good recap of Armageddon after forgetting some of the results. Opening commentary I didn't really bother reading as it can't really be that different to what I just read in the package.
Starting the show with Jack Swagger is the obvious thing to do here, so good work, although I'm yet to make up my mind on what I think of him as champion. This has to be a good promo though and btw, getting the guy to open the ropes was a nice touch. The first line is a bit cliche but if it fits with the storyline from his title chase than its okay. His coming lines are okay but nothing outstanding character-wise. I love your crowd reactions btw. The 'tier of champions' bit was very clever as well as the 'swagger' mention. Girlfriend bit and the HA didn't really sound like Swagger but I guess it fits with his general cockiness. Vintage comment wasn't necessary and I don't know if you inserted it for shits and giggles because that's all it seems. Cena interrupting was bound to happen but I liked Swagger getting a comment in before the former champ started talking. The promo sort of goes downhill from Cena's entrance as nothing phenomenal is said apart from a rather anti-climactic announcement of the rematch for tonight. I lol'd at Shane saying that Cena will NOT receive a title shot after tonight!!!... except next week. Good promo overall.
I don't like MVP still teaming with Mark Henry and I doubt that this match would have gone over 5 minutes. If you're pushing Guerrero as more than a jobber than having him win something would be the way to go. The 'bend down for back body drop but get kicked in the face' spot usually works better with the heel on the receiving end. Low blow was a nice heel move by Chavo but the ending after a missed move by Guerrero makes MVP look weaker than he should. Nice to see him have a proper finisher though. I'm not too sure what to think about this Bourne/Sweeney thing. I'm sure he will end up as Evan's manager but it intrigues me to see how you go about it. Nice interaction with you showing the character of Sweeney already.
The divas match could be good but Melina pwns all three girls any day. There's okay triple threat action and I was shocked about Kim pinning Kelly and my first thought was a heel turn in the near future. Against Melina it's possible to make the feud more interesting. Maryse post match just seemed weird and I don't know where it will lead. The 'Sultry Diva' nickname doesn't do it for me either. Ugh, Palumbo returning isn't something I'm too happy with. He wouldn't get real heat, just like D'Lo didn't get a real pop on his return. The promo is very meh and I don't know if him saying BIKER STYLE~!~!!!!111 twice was an accident or not but it made him look like a joke in my eyes. He better not receive a good push.
I didn't read Orton's entrance because I want to save being bored by him until a few lines into the promo. I like how you kept Orton's lines short me, as it made them all more special and interesting. No complaints so far. Rhodes and DiBiase have good lines as well, and I liked the quoting in particular. Shit, what a swerve. Great move to have Orton forgive them and continue Legacy, but in a way this undoes what they've done so far in terms of dissension between the three. I'm looking forward to how this angle continues next week, and props for making all three guys interesting.
Ok, next we get a Royal Rumble qualifying match with Priceless and the Colons. I'm confused, are the brothers teaming up again or is it just a one time thing? If it's the former then I have no problem but you could have called it a 'one night only' kind of thing. If it's the latter then it sucks you had them lose like they did. If you actually did mention somewhere what the situation was, then I apologise. Anyway, the match was fine except for DiBiase's elbow drop spot which seemed weird and exaggerated. You like using capitals which is fine but don't overuse them. Primo dodging an elbow is more important than a big springboard moonsault for a near fall? I don't know. Anyway, Legacy in the Rumble is nice but it saddens me to see that Carlito and Primo will miss out. I guess there could still be second chances though.
Previously, I had virtually zero idea of Sweeney's character but this promo, coupled with the one outside, pretty much put it into my head. He's loud, hot-headed and manipulation, not to mention rather random. He seems like an excellent guy to have in your BTB, especially as Bourne's manager. The Miz was great as usual in this promo although I didn't really pay attention to what he was saying as Sweeney is what was exciting me in this promo. The ending was fabulous and I marked hard. Would have been great to see irl. Masters backstage was weird as you seem to be pushing him as a reckless meanie but you just debuted Palumbo who is pretty much the same. A move to Smackdown could do him good but beating up cruiserweight's isn't going to get him anywhere.
Santino versus Palumbo, oh joy. Santino's lines before the match were gold and I remember when I failed at writing with his character. This was definitely good though and you kept it short so it wouldn't get boring. The cheap shot from Palumbo was nice but the match itself was nothing to gawk at. You tried to make Palumbo interesting but it's virtually impossible. I guess he had a few nice moves, but meh. Jamie Noble at home is cute, and I'm almost hoping for a HHH-esque home invasion from Sheamus. Anyway, Noble cuts a typical underdog face promo but it was more effective than a revenge-fuelled Sheamus promo would have been. Please put Noble in the Rumble and give him a spot in Mania, if only in Money in the Bank.
Just a minor gripe, but I would have had Swagger enter first for the main event. Starting the recap with the Swagger Splash (better name than what you called it, and creative as well!!! >_>) was good as it immediately established Swagger's dominance. Him going for it the second time just had a really predictable outcome but I guess it could be regarded as a rookie mistake. Don't know why you put the flying shoulder block in caps, it's not really a big spot. Spin-Out Side Slam Bomb needs a new name, pronto. The reversal of the FU into the schoolboy was nice, but a dirty finish would have been better with Swagger putting his hand on the ropes and the referee not seeing it. It would have given him more heat and Cena could still cut the same 'waa I didn't lose' promo next week.
Overall, good show. Promos were great with the exceptions of ones with the boring guys (Noble, Palumbo) that you naturally struggled to make interesting. They were still good for what they were though. Matches were good recaps and just a suggestion is maybe adding a paragraph or two to the main event or a feature match just to emphasise it as a great contest. Anyway, I was entertained throughout, so great job.
Last edited by X-Power; 03-19-2010 at 04:01 AM.