This is my first time reading this thread so bear with me, please.
The video package leads me to believe that Michaels could look for some sort of revenge on Triple H and lead to a feud. I'll go out on a limb and say it's possible that we could see Triple H/Michaels @ 'Mania, with Michaels maybe retiring after that?
Hmm, I'm a little surprised that Swagger is WWE Champion and it's only mid-January 2010. Hopefully you made him credible before you put the title on him. Swagger seemed to be nicely in character for this segment. I felt it was a bit too over the top in the sense that he was so involved with himself. Obviously you're trying to portray him as that cocky heel who thinks he's the greatest thing going, but at times I felt like it was a bit much. He was also pummelled with heat after every sentence or two, which is good, but again can be a bit much. Triple H addressed Swagger by 'kid' twice in a short time span, and so I was getting a bit worried, but luckily he got away from that. A pop after referring to the fact that he's a 13-time World Champ would've been nice. Swagger was going really strong once he interrupted - I was really enjoying what he was saying and picturing it really well until he said "I'm two and zero" ... that's not exactly something to brag about haha. Ahhhh he said kid again
. To be honest, I was hoping that the segment would have ended right there, but what you did served a purpose as it set up a main event, which is always helpful.
It's good to hear Melina giving some positive comments about Gail Kim. Of course, it's in character, but it's the truth - push her if possible please and see what you can do with her mic skills to try and get her over. A solid diva's match here, both are pretty good workers. Is her finisher actually called Eat Defeat, or did you just make that up? I lol'd at it. It should be interesting to see what happens with Melina and her title and defending it and all that jazz. I would be happy with her dropping it to Maryse or Gail, but even happier with her keeping it for a while longer since she's the most over diva on the roster (along with Mickie James, but she's on SmackDown iirc).
It's always funny to read someone trying to write an accent. You did a pretty good job with it, though. The good part about this promo is that it served a purpose, which is what everything on the show has done thus far from what I can tell. Nothing has happened that is insignificant, so good booking skills there.
Clearly I have to catch myself up on this whole situation involving Rhyno. Assuming he debuted recently, although I haven't followed the 'E in quite some time so he could be there and I just don't know it (but I don't think that's the case). I'm intrigued to see what you do with Rhodes & DiBiase. Right now in the 'E they both seem to be getting pretty good pushes, but I see DiBiase coming out successfuly simply because his gimmick has been done and works, whereas Rhodes' gimmick is just awful (DASHING). As a suggestion for future shows, stating someone's whole name for dialogue is recommende and helps quite a bit, especially if there is more than one superstar with the same last name (example, the McMahon family). And besides, it looks more professional. It's good that you're building a solid feud in the tag team division. I have felt that the WWE's tag team division hasn't received proper attention in recent years, so hopefull you can turn it around. Rhodes clapping doesn't seem to fit his character, or the team's character, especially after DiBiase was a raging asshole before the match started. DiBiase came across as bland in this match. I know his arsenal is pretty basic, but try taking more risks with him if you can (not as in off the top rope, but new moves and stuff like that). I'm so glad that Tatsu went over, this is what was needed. Rhodes & DiBiase don't need to build any more momentum for the time being. Legacy heading up the ramp seems unlikely. An attempted attack afterwards would have been better after they were so vicious before the match started.
Very good interview segment, great stuff. I would have to go out on a limb and say you're a better promo writer and match writer, but that isn't saying you aren't a good match writer (I've never read a match in full of yours so I suppose I can't make an accurate assessment). Anyways, I don't see this promo serving as a whole lot since Chavo won't main event WrestleMania and will probably be lucky to get on the card (although I wouldn't mind seeing him on the card tbh).
I'm sorry, I had to go google Larry Sweeney
. That combined weight is a bit pathetic haha. Also, I'm not sure what to say about the Bourne push. It could go good, but he strikes me as a bit of a little kid (just the way he looks), so if you can pull it off than go for it, but otherwise, stay away from pushing him please. Good stuff @ The Miz being champion. He turned out a lot better than what I would have ever expeted ... push him to the moon. I'm assuming that this match is around the mid-way point of the show, although it's a bit early. The match would work as the semi-main event, though. A suggestion for your match writing - try not to overuse the ellipsis all the time, and instead, use commas and periods. Ellipsises (?) are good in certain situations, but not in every sentence. So I'm getting a little bit concerned about this whole Jamie Noble/Sheamus business. Either you don't agree with the 'E pushing Sheamus and are dropping him to the level that Noble's at, or you see something in Noble I don't and are pushing him to a higher level. Hopefully it's not the latter. Thus far I've noticed that only faces have won their matches. It could be merely for booking purposes, but it could also be for entertainment purposes. Be careful about going for entertainment purposes (if that is the case) because people on here prefer better booking choices, although we all like to be entertained every once in a while.
Another solid promo. Sometimes I felt like you were trying too hard with the crowd reactions, meaning you put them in when perhaps they shouldn't have. It isn't unusual for a crowd to be pretty boring since it happens quite a bit. It's good to see a Cena promo where he isn't yelling into the camera to the point where his veins start popping out of the neck, or where he's trying so hard to be funny we start laughing at him, not with him.
Like the last promo, I think the crowd was overreacting. I guess that's something in your promo writing to work on since the rest of it is pretty flawless from what I can see. I felt like Orton's character was slipping as the promo carried on. He isn't usually someone who gets phased by the audience much, but instead, relishes on the heat and becomes more aggressive and 'viporous'. He's also not usually the type to host an open challenge, although it could work and will be acceptable if it leads to something big/good. MVP was in pretty good character, it's just that Orton slipped more and more as the promo carried on, I'm afraid
. That's okay, at least it means there's room for improvement, which is always good. Idk about an Orton/MVP feud, I'll have to wait and see if it develops into something long-term or not. Preferably, I'd like to see MVP as a heel and being pushed to the moon, but he's an entertainer so he's good value as a face. The match next week should be pretty good.
SOUR GRAPES! Pft, love Shawn to death (in a BTB sense he isn't the greatest, unfortunately) but he needs to stop being butthurt. Meh, should lead to an interesting feud between the two. If you give these two 30 minutes at WrestleMania, that would be pretty damn awesome. Everybody always complains that we don't wanna see it again, but fuck it, if it leads to some sort of retirement and buries the hatchet or something, idk, it'd be worth it.
Ahhhhhh @ Big Show being champion. Well, that's a little bias since I don't like him from a BTB standpoint. Still .. ahhhhhhhh!
Jesus that SmackDown recap was outrageously long. Don't do that again, please just include the key key key points of the main event/important segment and don't do anymore (30-45 seconds max would do imo).
This is the match that I am looking forward to quite a bit as a first-time reader. Naturally, I would expect Kofi to win, but there is always the possibility that you have plans for Masters. Both should be in the rumble anyways. Masters looked fairly strong in this match, which was what I had hoped for. I think he could have been even more dominant, but I guess you were smart and played it safe by not ruining Kofi's credibility. In the end, the right person won.
A Melina interview was unnecessary due to the fact that she did commentary already, which means we've already heard her thoughts on the title situation. The plus to this promo is that you didn't whore out the crowd reactions
I feel pretty stupid. When I saw 'NEXT' appears in the corner, I didn't realize it meant that their match was next. I immediately jumped to detective mode and assumed you were introducing NXT or the Nexus or something like that. Oh man ... well, anyways haha ... Chavo interrupting the match is a little strange. Not because I'm out of the loop, but because I don't expect Chavo being involved in the upper card/main event picture. Also, I wasn't aware (probably missed it earlier on in the show anyways) that they were still together as DX, I figured there was confrontation because they were friends. Swagger winning maintains his credibility and builds him up even stronger, which was necessary after calling himself great 100 times at the beginning of the show, and because he is a young, new champion.
Overall, I decided I should go review a show and chose yours randomly, and I must admit, I am very happy that I did that. It was quite a good show and impressed me from start to finish. You know what you're doing, especially with some good booking decisions as well as good match writing, but just use full names, cut back on ..., and work on Orton's character in your writing. But otherwise, a good show, you've got my attention and I plan on becoming a full-time reader
Also, kudos to you for sticking with ECW. It's definitely not an easy thing to do 3 shows a week.