~ It makes sense to start the show of with a video package after a pay-per-view and I am glad you did that. It was a nice recap of the main event. I would have liked a little more commentary at the start of the show but if commentary isn’t your thing than fair dues. Already I see a difference in the entrances, the way you described Orton and Rhodes coming out is much better than your old way. I am glad you took my – and others – advice.
~ Starts of like a typical Orton promo, putting himself over and talking about himself and his title. Orton was in character here. So Hardy and Punk are in hospital? A new challenger perhaps? Ted DiBiase could be the new challenger but I don’t think he has enough credibility yet. I really expected Ted to come out here, I would enjoy another Orton/DiBiase confrontation but then John Cena comes out. I didn’t enjoy the comment about the love affair by Cena, wow way to put down Swagger and Kidd. It seemed like this is what this promo was to put down Ted, Cody, Swagger and Kidd. So, Orton Vs Cena for the WWE Championship, I expect someone to interfere on Orton’s behalf. Anyway, start of the promo was good, Orton was in character and so was Cena. But I just didn’t like the way he puts down four superstars. I didn’t see the point in rolling a tape that consisted of what we just saw. You could have Cena justs tell Randy that he heard what he said earlier.
at Cody, he just stood there the whole promo and the only thing he did was try to calm Orton down at the end. Good promo to start the show but it had some issues.
~ The match description of Rated Y2J Vs MCMG was good if not a bit shaky at times. Since you had kind of a dirty finish then I see a rematch at the next pay-per-view. I don’t expect Rated Y2J to lose the titles soon though.
~ Make sure to read over you’re work before you post,Anyway I didn’t enjoy this bit because with Orton telling Rhodes to interfere only if it looks like hes about to be beat, it makes Cody look bad because he looks like Orton’s bitch. Plus, it makes the main event quite predictable. Lol @ Cody being better than Ted. I didn’t get Codys line to DiBiase TBH until I read it over then I noticed what you meant. This seems like the start of a push for Ted, it would have been interesting if Cody said he wasn’t going to help Orton.
~ AJ Styles? I had no idea he was in this BTB. Cody looked like a little bitch here, it seems like Rhodes was dominated then realised he was no match for Styles (which is true) and left. Kind of bad for Rhodes cred, but I guess it made AJ look strong since he made someone leave the match because he was being dominated.
~ Typical start to the VIP lounge, MVP seemed in character here. I’m guessing that the Ziggler/MVP feud is over now that Burke debuted by interrupting MVP. Lol at Burke ripping on MVP. Burke was good here and an MVP/Burke feud would be good. The Elijah Experience... Ok. Uppercut to MVP, Ok now the feud begins. Wait, was that it? An uppercut to MVP. Quite a lacklustre debut TBF, I would have liked to see MVP get a few shots in then Burke take the advantage. I will say this though, MVP was in character for the most part, as was Burke, I believe this was as good as the opening promo if not better.
~ Ok, the Ryder/Kendrick exchange was good here and I lol’d at Ryder kissing the mirror. I don’t think he’s as cocky as that however. The facebook, XOXO, Brad and Angelina line was pure gold, something I could envision Ryder saying that in real life. You wrote Ryder a lot better than you did at Bragging Rights. Please keep Kendrick away from Ryder as a tag team partner. I really feel he could be a great singles competitor plus he’s already been in a tag team. However with the “complete tool” line I think they will feud. I’m indifferent about this to be honest. I’d like him to win the title from Morrison which I believe he should have won at Bragging Rights. I hope Tiffany actually does something to help Ryder this time as she done nothing at Bragging Rights and by doing something she’ll really cement herself as his manager. This was a nice promo to get across Ryder’s cockiness.
~ It’s good that Tiffany got involved as it establishes them as a couple, the dirty win is really something that I think can put over someone as the sly heel or the cocky heel. I still can’t tell if Kendrick/Ryder will be a tag team or a feud or neither. The Shelton/Swagger match, I expect that the feud has now ended and they’ll both move onto other things. Since I’ve started following this thread, Shelton has won twice. It could be the end or you may have Swagger get a victory.
~ Shad and JTG weren’t in character much here. I don’t like how Magnus never said anything, he just stood there letting Burchill do the talking. Well, looks like Cryme Tyme/Burchill and Magnus feud is on the horizon. I like how you are building more than one feud within the tag division. “Hater-ade” ugh. Nice little interview, that put over the fact that Cena wants the WWE Championship. That Hater-ade line was terrible. I just seemed so cheesy.
~ By the backstage promo earlier, I always new the outcome and how it would go down. Rhodes interfering was obvious, DiBiase was not. So Ted changed is mind, I guess this means no push, he’s just going to go back to being Orton’s bitch just like Rhodes is.
All in all, I enjoyed reading the show. There were some questionable booking, some grammar issues. Just remember to look over the show once you are done writing. I think with improvement, you could be really good. Also I hope you stick with this thread, good luck with the rest of the thread.