Re: WWE 2009-- Wrestlemania 25 and on!
I believe that none of you lot get the point, he's new and is trying his best, that's all we can ask, spamming certainly isn't helping though. However, 'we all have a right to comment' and 'as long as it constructive' etc. No, actually, people are posting slightly out of constructive here, and everyone is repeating the same shit anyways. Good luck mate, don't take criticism to heart mate and you'll obviously improve, just work on some decent feedback which actually tells you how to improve, not what to do and don't change just because people tell you to, it's YOUR thread.
First off mate, could’ve done with some segments and promos in between matches, I know there were some probably and hopefully but you didn’t state them, even just marking (- Cena promo, talks shit about Umaga and then the Bulldozer comes out and beats Cena to a living piece of crap) for example might give us that touch of what’s happening and stuff. Not gonna go into great detail on matches, simple endings and average stuff, good for a newbie.
Promos - 0/10
Segments - 0/10
Realism - 10/20
Entertainment - 7/10
Spelling - 10/10
Effort - 18/20
Show Rating - 13/20
OVERALL - 57/100
Good attempt, promos and backstage segments let you down slightly, but for your first show getting above half marks is very good mate, If you stick with this stuff and try your best then you’ll go far, remember to take your time.
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For future reference
Enjoy yourself developing the storylines. Good luck. When writing an average Raw or SmackDown, then writing in full MOST of the time would be a good idea, a recap here and there won’t hurt unless something major happens. Matches certainly don’t need to be in full. I suggest matches be just 3 or 4 lines to tell the reader how tense the match has been and the last move or so. If a more interesting match say a No DQ Match or something along those lines, perhaps a good couple of paragraphs to give the key events.
IMPORTANT NOTES - You feel the thread more than the reader, so try to include much detail, as for the matches are far less important than the promos and speaking points, because they get more feeling and emotion into it, rather than the actual match. As you can see I don’t give any marks in the matches, promos and segments have fifth of MY marking system anyways, show rating and effort have 2 fifths to themselves were spelling, entertainment and your spelling go for the rest. Try to enjoy yourself and take your time, and you may be a future Mac, Nige or Legend etc.