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crooked_reflection · 11-16-2008, 08:27 PM

I couldn't tell you. You don't sub4sub... whatever that means. Do yourself a favor and read the rules.

Backlash · 11-16-2008, 08:30 PM

Tell Me!

**Mr. Kanefan** · 11-16-2008, 08:34 PM

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Originally Posted by Backlash_08

Tell Me!

Okay stop it now. You bumped your Wrestlemania post saying that no-one liked it, after just about an hour. This place doesn't work like that.

Also if sub4sub means review for review, you're not doing yourself any favours by actually asking for reviews.

Backlash · 11-16-2008, 08:43 PM

Well people were posting like mad men 10 minutes before I posted WM and then everyone stopped!

**DTJ** · 11-16-2008, 10:27 PM

Firstly: Read threads bro. Second: That WM didn't make any sense to me what so ever. I was confused as to why Cena faced Saun (Suppose to be SHAWN) Michaels AND Triple H? Why did that happen? Hornswoggle in a WM Match and WON a title? Not good booking. Two ladder matches after eachother.. Not too great either man. MITB: Good winner, but in my opinion you have too many big men in there. Khali, Kane, Umaga, Knox.. That's overload. The match times you gave seem a bit too long too, I think people would get bored of it after a while.

Sorry if I seem like a prick, just trying to help out

THEHIPPIE89 · 11-17-2008, 03:44 PM

yeah i was a little confused too. i think u should have included more of a backstory as to how the matches came about instead of just putting them together, then maybe i would understand it more, but the way u had it, i was just lost with ur card. sry dude, just trying to help u out with this.

Backlash · 11-17-2008, 03:53 PM

MoNDAY N!GHT RAW PReVIEW
After An Explosive Wrestlemania 25, What will happen Next? What will be the Actions For The New World Champions, Bobby Lashley and The Undertaker?

This week on Raw there is the planning of a decision of whether Hornswoggle shall keep his Cruiserweight Title or not. Shane McMahon will be to decide this complicated decision. If Hornswoggle Leaves and the Title goes with him, It will be vacated. If Kept here it will bee given back to Chavo Guerrero. He would be set-up for a championship match The following week on Raw.

We Have 2 New Heavyweight Champions and I Believe Shane McMahon has scheduled These Phenomenons to go 1 on 1 this week on Raw!

After A return of Trish Stratus Last week at Wrestlmania, Beth Pheonix's team Is now completely tipped over the edge. I believe they wanted a Wrestlemania Rematch, But it as not been made official yet by The General Manager.

AND MORE!

What will Orton's Precautions be for What he did to The Rock at Wrestlemania?
Where does Matt Hardy Stand after earning a new nickname, Mr. Money in the bank?
What will Jericho and MVP do with their new #1 Contendership?
Will New Intercontinental Champion Mr. Kennedy Wrack up a win?
How Will DX react with a loss from John Cena?
FIND OUT THIS SATURDAY!

JD-T4CKTiiCKz · 11-17-2008, 03:57 PM

I believe that none of you lot get the point, he's new and is trying his best, that's all we can ask, spamming certainly isn't helping though. However, 'we all have a right to comment' and 'as long as it constructive' etc. No, actually, people are posting slightly out of constructive here, and everyone is repeating the same shit anyways. Good luck mate, don't take criticism to heart mate and you'll obviously improve, just work on some decent feedback which actually tells you how to improve, not what to do and don't change just because people tell you to, it's YOUR thread.

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Feedback

First off mate, could’ve done with some segments and promos in between matches, I know there were some probably and hopefully but you didn’t state them, even just marking (- Cena promo, talks shit about Umaga and then the Bulldozer comes out and beats Cena to a living piece of crap) for example might give us that touch of what’s happening and stuff. Not gonna go into great detail on matches, simple endings and average stuff, good for a newbie.

Promos - 0/10
Segments - 0/10
Realism - 10/20
Entertainment - 7/10
Spelling - 10/10
Effort - 18/20
Show Rating - 13/20

OVERALL - 57/100

Good attempt, promos and backstage segments let you down slightly, but for your first show getting above half marks is very good mate, If you stick with this stuff and try your best then you’ll go far, remember to take your time.

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For future reference

Enjoy yourself developing the storylines. Good luck. When writing an average Raw or SmackDown, then writing in full MOST of the time would be a good idea, a recap here and there won’t hurt unless something major happens. Matches certainly don’t need to be in full. I suggest matches be just 3 or 4 lines to tell the reader how tense the match has been and the last move or so. If a more interesting match say a No DQ Match or something along those lines, perhaps a good couple of paragraphs to give the key events.

IMPORTANT NOTES - You feel the thread more than the reader, so try to include much detail, as for the matches are far less important than the promos and speaking points, because they get more feeling and emotion into it, rather than the actual match. As you can see I don’t give any marks in the matches, promos and segments have fifth of MY marking system anyways, show rating and effort have 2 fifths to themselves were spelling, entertainment and your spelling go for the rest. Try to enjoy yourself and take your time, and you may be a future Mac, Nige or Legend etc.

Shadow Slasher · 11-17-2008, 11:06 PM

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Originally Posted by JD™

I believe that none of you lot get the point, he's new and is trying his best, that's all we can ask, spamming certainly isn't helping though. However, 'we all have a right to comment' and 'as long as it constructive' etc. No, actually, people are posting slightly out of constructive here, and everyone is repeating the same shit anyways. Good luck mate, don't take criticism to heart mate and you'll obviously improve, just work on some decent feedback which actually tells you how to improve, not what to do and don't change just because people tell you to, it's YOUR thread.

^ Thats the golden picture right there.

I will review Raw once its up. WrestleMania 25 was great, but improvments are needed. I will do a full up review once Raw is up.

Backlash · 11-19-2008, 02:44 PM

From WWE.com

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Ladies and Gentleman, The general Manager Shane McMahon Has Just Identified that there will be a very extraordinary womens match on Raw. It will be a 5 on 5 Wrestlemania rematch, with a special guest referee, Trish Stratus!

And guys, I don't think Raw will be posted by saturday, it will probably take longer. I have been working on it and mid show all my files somehow were deleted. so I have to rewrite it. just letting you guys know!

EDIT: This will be posted on Saturday.