Lashley, here is my review for your first show
. Don't be worried by my critical review. Its only your first show, and I want to provide you with a basis that will help you improve.
Umaga vs. Drew McIntyre – Umaga’s dominance was established which was probably the objective for this match, but this was not a good choice to kick off the Raw after Wrestlemania. Something special could have occurred, not a squash match.
Highlight Reel – An entertaining promo. Mr. Kennedy and Chris Jericho will have made this promo brilliant as they heave with charisma. Even CM Punk is not awful on the microphone. What impressed me further was the angle introduced. A potential feud between CM Punk and either Mr Kennedy or Chris Jericho over the Money in the Bank briefcase should be rather interesting.
Cryme Tyme vs. Lance Cade & Trevor Murdoch – I know fans find Cryme Tyme entertaining during their promos when they “steal” things, but I’d prefer it if Cryme Tyme established a more serious personality. So, the whole angle with Shad stealing Trevor Murdoch’s cap is not the best possible event that could have occurred in this match. Furthermore, it is more realistic that JTG is dominated by the opposing tag team, rather than Shad because he is the powerhouse.
William Regal-Randy Orton Segment – A good angle introduced with Randy Orton being able to pick his opponents.
Santino Marella vs. Cody Rhodes – A solid match with a nice finish. I like the angle how Carlito interferes and nails the Backstabber on Rhodes. Its nice to see that you are utilizing the tag team division.
Randy Orton Interview – This is good as it adds further mystery to the angle introduced earlier.
Beth Phoenix vs. Ashley – Again, a needless squash match. There are other possible Divas that could have been picked as an opponent for Beth Phoenix rather than Ashley, e.g. Mickie James, Melina or Jillian Hall. This type of match does not do much for either of the competitors and it does not draw fans.
Mr. Kennedy vs. Chris Jericho – Rather disappointing for what could have been something special. More attention could have been paid to grapple moves rather than just strikes. It was nice to see than an attempted Lionsault was included, but more signature manoeuvres could have been utilized. Anyhow, it was a good result, and a CM Punk vs. Mr. Kennedy match at Backlash has potential.
Ric Flair Farewell Ceremony – This would have been special and I like the touch with the banner dropping down from the Raw set. However, WWE booked the original Ric Flair ceremony almost to perfection and not meaning to diminish your’s, but not many others could top their’s. Anyway, a good finish to Raw.
Overall: I have a couple of suggestions to make:
• Certain aspects of the show need lengthening – the promos may need writing out in full and more detail needs to be added to the matches. If you don’t want to add more detail to the matches, just describe the finishes to the matches in detail, which is what other writers do.
• Cut out squash matches. They do not add anything to the quality of the show. Instead, they decrease the quality of the product and do not draw fans.
• Regarding your first show, I am going to admit that it was rather lacklustre. None of the matches were above average and its hard to feel the true spirit of promos when they are written in little detail.
Rating: 3.75/10
Lashley ™ Presents: World Wrestling Entertainment
Re: Lashley ™ Presents: World Wrestling Entertainment
COming from a guy who obviously has NEVER done a BTB in his life.
