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gmkhercules · 06-07-2008, 09:31 AM

Review for Monday Night Raw:

First of all, Lashley, decide whether you are doing a recap or a full show. As WCW says, its either or neither.

And hey, practise your match writing skills in RAW and Smackdown. Trust me, they will help you writing PPVs (where it is required for FULL matches to be written or else the show wont be good.)

I see you use colors, which by the way is good.

And pal, if you want to make some name here like KOP or others like Szumi or Wolf Beast, show them skills on matches or promos. I see you do your promos well. So keep it up and shine on them.

The Shawn Michaels promo was good and so Shawn defeats Umaga to become the guest referee. Thats cool!
The Cody Rhodes vs Marella match was nice but I recommend you dont use "Italian Idiot" again. Sort of abuse, if i may say.

Kennedy vs DH Smith seemed longer than the Marella vs Cody Rhodes match. Watch out on the lengths and give importance as the star value increases. Decent jobbing done is all i can say.

Cena's promo was good and i liked it. He was very much good old and original.

Maria vs Melina looked good and nice to see Maria get a victory. I like that ! Lets see if Maria can take the gold away from someone!

The Triple Threat match was good. Better than matches so far. Nice to see Jericho win. He's one of my favs, so glad to see him win!

HBK-Orton promo can be a bit more entertaining! I dont say bad because as of now, Orton and HBK can only talk about hurting each other and Backlash. But, the fans dont realise that. So, try like, Forget Backlash, lets see whaat you got tonight stuff!

JBL vs HHH was nice and shocking to see my man, Da Game go down clean. Aww, that hurts me man. But the match was good.

Cena vs Orton with HBK as ref seemed rather decent and hey, people usually expect a twist when not expected ( little confusing, i agree). You can still work on this and hey, continue booking man, you will reach the spotlight! Just concentrate on Backlash, now that you have hyped it so much and make it your best so far. Wish you luck and keep writing!
Overall, i would give 6.5-7/10 . I look forward to your next one to see how you have done it.

BTW man, MY RAW IS WAR is up. Check it out when you have time!

Lashley™ · 06-07-2008, 09:48 AM

Thanks for the review for your first statement I already said I am going to stick to recaps as doing full just isn't for me. Expect the ECW Preview up tonight.

**CM Dealer** · 06-07-2008, 09:54 AM

Looking forward to ECW. Congrats on getting nominated in the BTB Awards.

gmkhercules · 06-07-2008, 10:08 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lashley™

Thanks for the review for your first statement I already said I am going to stick to recaps as doing full just isn't for me. Expect the ECW Preview up tonight.

oops, sorry! did not see that! ok man, all the best!

Lashley™ · 06-09-2008, 01:03 PM

The Face Off

Tonight when the superstars of ECW and SmackDown! roll into Denver, Colorado we can expect that it will be extreme! Especially since ECW General Manager, Alejandro Estrada is opening the show to announce what exactly will be in the main event. Nobody knows what it could be but he promises it to be extreme.

Last week on Friday Night SmackDown! we found out that ECW legend, Rob Van Dam would return to the WWE and ECW to help his old friend Tommy Dreamer fight for the tag team titles at Backlash. Rob Van Dam's return isn't a temporary one which he has stated in an interview on WWE.COM, tonight he will make his awaited return to the land of extreme.

The Big Show has had it rough...Or big as some could say as he has faced challenge after challenge, monster after monster, and has come out on top. Last week on SmackDown! was something we have never witnessed before as we seen the 'Samoan Bulldozer' Umaga plow through The Big Show during his handicap match against The Great Khali and Mark Henry. Several Samoan Spikes were enough to stop 'The Largest Athlete' and have him bleeding from the mouth.

Mr. Money In The Bank, CM Punk has a tough challenge against the loudmouth Mr. Kennedy, who likes to talk the talk but can actually back it up. At Backlash the two wage war as they both face off, Kennedy will be fighting to keep him on RAW and to claim the Money In The Bank Briefcase from Punk, Punk will fight to keep the briefcase and have Kennedy's RAW contract destroyed. However Punk has to make sure he gets through tonight as he faces a strong competitor in Mike Knox.

Don't miss all this and more when ECW comes to you from Denver, Colorado, 9/10pm EST

**Antgreen** · 06-09-2008, 01:41 PM

ECW is looking good mate, can't wait to read it! I'll review it for ya.

619indahouse · 06-09-2008, 03:49 PM

Well I promised you a while back, and I've been very lazy with revs the past month or so, so here I am. Sorry for makin' ya wait so long for it. Sorry if there's anything I don't understand in this review; this is the first time I've read your shows

. Hope all is well

Anyway, here's what I came for-

619s Feedback For Lashleys Monday Night RAW

Well, as RAW kicks off, I get a good look at your promo skills. Shawn seems a bit too agressive at the outset of the promo. "Damn" and "hell" thrown in there, just talking about a match. NOt very characteristic as far as HBK is concerned, especially not since you want him to seem sort of a face. Also, I don't understand why Michaels wants to be, and asks to be, guest referee. It makes more sense to me in his character to want in on the match, and Regal give him the guest referee proposal. Love the dig at creative and the "scouts honor" line (being a Scout myself ).

This match with Umaga was a bit rushed, in terms of execution (Regal announcing the match) and the match itself (in terms of flow). I think this would be a little later in the show so Michaels can reasonably prepare. Plus, Umaga sort of seems to be squashed in this and that's not cool (or maybe I'm just one of the few who like Umaga )

The flow into this second match was a little weird. I couldn't exactly find where Rhodes came in the ring, but you got Santino's accent/character pretty much spot on. I would've prefered Cody to win, but maybe this actually leads to something interesting between the two teams.

The Orton segment wasn't great, imo. Too short, not enough detail, and not in character. Orton would be a little more agressive, a little like Michaels in the opener. I don't think Orton would acknowledge the fact that he might get hurt, just focus on destroying Cena (again), ya know?

The Kennedy match was pure squash. I thought Smith should've got a little bit more offense, and Kennedy nailing three signatures in a row is a little extreme. Nice, anyway, did it's job.

The lovley?!? Not sure Melina would call Cena "lovley", I don't care how many clits are in line for him . That aside, I think a few more words from Cena would've been good before he exploded in anger. Not sure Cena would blame anyone but himself for his losses. So I don't exactly comprehend with him saying Orton was "lucky". It just doesn't sound like him. You could've had Cena ask about Maria's match, too. Doesn't she have a match later...?

I don't think you needed a commercial break between the announcers and the Backlash promo. Kinda interupted the feel, yknow?

...gues I was right about Maria. Great win for Maria here, possibly a push in the works...?

Not sure why there's a Trips promo placed between commercial breaks.

Well, nice to see you're actually pushing Jericho a bit, but I really didn't like that it was a clean finish. Both of Jericho's opponents got nailed with a Codebreaker, not to mention the stronger of the two tapping out. Not very great booking for me right now. HOwever, I'll just have to see what you do with it.

Y'know, you made the interviewer sound like a total jobber, lol. Just calling him interviewer, and as soon as Orton mentioned something about actions and words, I knew an RKO was coming. Love the RKO to the "interviewer".

Didn't think JBL/Tripls would end clean, either. I would've thought Trips would've come out on top at least. Not sure why JBL got the win, even if he wants a piece of Orton.

Wow, Orton sounds like a dick. Even the heels hate him. Great to see JBL was in better character in this second segment. Never heard the term 'segregate' before...

The Main event got very little detail. Not a very good idea tbh, and Michaels just steamrolls Orton through Cena. Pretty brutal and adds feul to the fire, however, I think Michaels could've been a little more comedic in his referee actions.

FINAL THOUGHTS: SOLID WITH ROOM FOR IMPROVEMENT. I'm not entireley sure why, but the show just didn't click. The flow of the show didn't connect well with me. Michaels, Cena, and Triple H were out of character. Your promos didn't have significant length or depth. The layout of your show was ok, the only thing that irked me was your commercial breaks were sometimes right before/after very short segments. Took a little excitement away for a little bit, which still isn't good. You've got room to improve, but I see loads of potential with this. Your midcard scene seems to be in great shape, with a triple threat for the IC title on a regular RAW. Hope Backlash is great
OVERALL: 6.5/10. I'm on your side, man

Lashley™ · 06-12-2008, 01:30 PM

Disappointed with it, this is the show I least like writing, but I shouldn't make excuses. Anyways, as always reviews, comments, etc. Are MUCH appreciated, and I will TRY to return them. I don't expect alot of people to rate this highly, its a decent show but not my best.
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Extreme Championship Wrestling; April 15th, 2008; Denver, Colorado

“The Face Off”

The usual video package plays for ECW with the song Don’t Question My Heart by Salvia. ECW kicks off the night with the ECW general manager, Alejandro Estrada making his way to the ring in his regular white suit with a few Cuban cigars in his breast pocket. He enters the ring and quickly receives a microphone. The general manager allows the fans to die down a bit with their cheering and some boos for the Cuban native. Alejandro Estrada then quickly gets onto why he is out here, he announces that tonight IN THE MAIN EVENT WE WILL SEE AN 8 MAN TAG TEAM MATCH FEATURING, KANE, ROB VAN DAM, TOMMY DREAMER AND MATT HARDY FACING CHAVO GUERRERO, THE MIZ, JOHN MORRISON AND MVP! The Cuban native general manager smiles obviously pleased with himself especially since the reaction of the crowd was crazy. Alejandro Estrada exits the ring and makes his way up the ramp.

{ Commercials }

We get the night underway with a match featuring the newest superstar to both the ECW and WWE roster, Colin Delaney as he faces ‘The Gold Standard’ Shelton Benjamin. Benjamin dominates basically all of the match as Colin Delaney hardly manages to lay a punch on the ‘Gold Standard’ the frustration of Colin Delaney starts to show as he turns psycho again and tries to dismantle Shelton Benjamin. Benjamin manages to fight off the onslaught and hit the Paydirt on Colin Delaney for the pinfall victory.

We cut backstage and see MVP sitting on a bench in his locker room, Chavo Guerrero, his partner for tonight walks in. Chavo tells MVP that what happened to Kennedy and him last week on Friday Night SmackDown was just lack of luck and not lack of skill, and that he shouldn’t worry about it. MVP looks him up and down and says I’m not worried but Chavo ignores him and carries on saying that tonight he should seek revenge on Hardy and he will help him do it if MVP helps him with Kane.

{ Commercials }

The second match of the night is used to hype up the Cruiserweight match at Backlash between Kofi Kingston and an unnamed superstar. Kofi dominates most of the match with Charlie Hass getting annoyed trying to cheat to win. Hass doesn’t get any momentum tonight though as Kofi fends off the cheating tactics and manages to win the match by hitting the Buzzaw Kick and pinning Charlie Hass for the victory.

A video plays and it announces that on the 12th of May, the second RAW after Backlash the 2008 annual WWE Draft will be held! It says that every member on the WWE roster is eligible, Champions, tag teams, injured superstars, commentators, everybody!

{ Commercials }

The Big Show takes on Nunzio in the next bout and absolutely demolishes him, obviously making a statement to Umaga who has been attacking him in recent weeks. The Big Show dismantles the smaller and much weaker Nunzio before finishing him off with The Showstopper for the pinfall victory. After the match The Big Show gets on the microphone and issues a challenge to Umaga, he tells Umaga that he wants him in a match next week on Friday Night SmackDown!

Kane is standing backstage and stares into the camera for several seconds without even moving, blinking, or breathing but he has the sinister smirk on his face. He starts to talk after a few eerie seconds and directs everything he says all to Chavo Guerrero. He says he has never quit…He will never quit and that Chavo will get a small sample of Backlash tonight. Kane starts to do his evil laugh as we cut away.

{ Commercials }

CM Punk takes on Mike Knox next as the bigger Mike Knox dominates the early going of the match easily picking up and throwing around Mr. Money In The Bank. Knox aims at CM Punk knee knowing if that is damaged then Punk cannot possibly hit the GTS. Punk manages to get back into the match eventually however and Knox’s plan doesn’t work as CM Punk wins the match with the GTS and then pinning Mike Knox. After the match CM Punk gets on the microphone and tells Kennedy to stop talking trash, because at Backlash there will be only one winner in that match, and you’re looking at him…Mr. Money In The Bank.

{ Commercials }

Rob Van Dam is standing alongside his friend and partner at Backlash, Tommy Dreamer. Dreamer and Rob Van Dam are actually talking about the match at Backlash when the number one contender to the United States Championship, Matt Hardy interrupts and welcomes Rob Van Dam back. RVD thanks him as him, Hardy and Dreamer discuss strategies for tonight’s match...Which is next!

{ Commercials }

The team of Rob Van Dam, Matt Hardy, Tommy Dreamer and ECW Champion, Kane take on The Miz, John Morrison, MVP and John Morrison.The heel team get the advantage in the early going with Morrison fighting Hardy. Morrison and The Miz’s quick tags and cheapshotting tactics have been too much for Hardy to build any offense. The face team manages to get some momentum in the tank after Rob Van Dam is tagged in and cleans house. Eventually the face team win when The Miz is planted with a Twist of Fate by the only standing rival on the opposite team, Matt Hardy. Matt covers for the pinfall victory.

Hardy stands tall in the ring as all of his team members enter the ring and celebrate with him, Kane lifts up his ECW title whilst Rob Van Dam, Dreamer and Matt Hardy lift their hands in the air in celebration, the crowd are cheering on the faces, as an irate Chavo looks on at Kane whilst Morrison and The Miz who has just accompanied him glare at RVD and Dreamer whilst lifting up the WWE Tag Team Titles. MVP and Hardy lock eyes as ECW comes to an end.

END OF SHOW

WWE Tag Team Championship Match
The Miz and John Morrison © vs. Rob Van Dam and Tommy Dreamer

Money In The Bank Briefcase vs. Mr. Kennedy’s RAW Contract
CM Punk vs. Mr. Kennedy

United States Championship Match
MVP © vs. Matt Hardy

Cruiserweight Championship Match
Kofi Kingston vs. ????

ECW Championship
Kane © vs. Chavo Guerrero in an I Quit Match

World Heavyweight Championship
The Undertaker © vs. Edge in an Table’s, Ladder’s and Chair’s Match

WWE Championship
Randy Orton © vs. Shawn Michaels

MikeRaw · 06-12-2008, 02:13 PM

Well Lashely..
This BTB is running very smoothly.. One of the better one's on the site I must say..
I give my respect to any writer who get's does RAW, Smackdown, and ECW together by himself...

I will review RAW, and ECW later on.. But right now I'm trying to catch up with eveything...
The Backlash poster is epic.. Who made it!?

Lashley™ · 06-12-2008, 02:17 PM

Just review ECW mate.

Oh, and B00ned.