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**Nov** · 04-25-2008, 05:48 AM

Raw Feedback

Opening Promo:
Wasn't too bad a promo, bit weird how Trips came out and said like one sentecne and then Orton comes out, you should of had Trips say more first, but anyway like how they both want a shot at the title and the idea of the mainevent is really good, looking forward to seeing who win's it. Everyone was in character pretty well, punctuation could do with some work but still a decent promo. I hope Kennedy wins the ME.

Hardy vs Y2J:
Really good match here, could of been written better and punctuation needs work but still the happenings of the match were great, really like the ending with ref down and MVP and all. Great match, could of been longer though.

Backstage Promo (Tag Team):
Not really needed, but I guess it does let you know that the match is going to happen, go Santino and carlito!

Womens Title Match:
Not the best match, pretty bad actually, for a start you just had Maria getting out of all these moves then Beth just hits here with something and shes out for the 3. What's with that, not a very good match sorry.

Randy/JBL promo: Too short for my liking, infact all of your promos are too short, although the two lines they said were okay, wonder if they will be able to co-operate.

Punk/Morrison Attack: Not too bad, Punk's few lines were really good, and since i'm such a big fan of Morrison I really like the attack. Hopefully he wins this week and wins at BL for the briefcase, anyway interested to see where your going with this.

Tag Team Turmoil:
Pretty good match here, would of rather Londrick start and make it too the end with Santino and Carlito. Because having two heels last the whole match is a bit stupid lol. And you should of had Carlito and Santino win. But still good action packed match.

ME:
MOTN for me, good action, only thing I don't like is Trips being eliminated first, I mean you had him in a promo earlier in the night declaring his want for the title and then he is eliminated first? Not a good move, but still like how Kennedy is getting his push. I can smell Triple H causing Orton the match next week. The ending was nice too, with the double pin.

Overall: Overall a reasonable show for your first ever. Your promos and matches are about par and you are evenly as good at both. Your promos need to be bigger and you need to make your matches longer, but still it's only your first show and you will always improve. I rate this show 5/10.

Edgehead9812 · 04-25-2008, 06:05 AM

Thanks for that alex. About my matches. My matches are usually the final few minutes or the sequence leading up to the pinfall or submission.

Edgehead9812 · 04-25-2008, 06:40 PM

ECW Preview

Tonight on our 1 hour show of ECW we are live from New York Maddison Square Garden. We have a match between John Morrison and Cm punk for Morrisons Right to face Punk at Backlash for the MITB briefcase. Armando Estrada has an announcement, Shelton Benjamin vs Kofi Kingston and our Main Event is Kane Vs elijah Burke.

Be sure to tuned in to this 1 hour of ECW only of sci-fi

Dantastic · 04-25-2008, 07:13 PM

Edghead9812, your BTB just caught my attention, so I thought I'd provide you with a Raw review

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Opening promo – A very good idea for a main event and a very good stipulation. However, the promo was a little too short and the wrestlers did not appear to be in character, particularly William Regal.

Chris Jericho vs. Matt Hardy – Good match time and a good, dramatic ending to the match. I like the interference from MVP as that will renew their classic rivalry from last year before Matt Hardy became injured. It was a good idea to have Chris Jericho retain. This could be my pick for match of the night. I really like the way it was scripted.

Beth Phoenix vs. Maria – I’m not too sure about having Maria challenging for the Women’s Championship. There are many more capable female members of the roster that could put on a better quality match than Maria – Mickie James, Melina, Jillian Hall and Candice Michelle. At least Beth Phoenix still looks powerful. It was the best finish possible.

CM Punk Promo – I like the angle set up here. John Morrison possibly challenging CM Punk for the Money in the Bank briefcase at Backlash should be a good match. I just have a suggestion and that is don’t tire this match out because some fans were getting a little tired of CM Punk vs. John Morrison consistently fighting over the ECW Championship in 2007.

Tag team turmoil – I liked this. Its nice to see that you are working on the tag team division. Paul London and Brian Kendrick are a good choice to win the match as they make credible tag team champions and are over with the crowd. I’m not so sure about the absence of Cryme Tyme from the match. They could have added that little bit extra as they are arguably the most popular tag team in the WWE.

Main Event – I was pleasantly surprised to see Triple H eliminated first. Its nice to see something different. Also, it was a good match time and a great way to finish the match. It is nice to see Mr. Kennedy in the title picture and as a face, but his sudden face turn does not flow directly after the existing Wrestlemania. Anyhow, its an interesting angle you have set up and one that will sure be appealing.

Overall: A good first show. Some great ideas for matches. Two suggestions for improvements: lengthen your promos a little and try and link things a little better. Other than that, there is potential.

Rating: 5.5/10

I hope it's helpful.

GADVFREAK99 · 04-25-2008, 08:52 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Edgehead9812

ECW Preview

Tonight on our 1 hour show of ECW we are live from New York Maddison Square Garden. We have a match between John Morrison and Cm punk for Morrisons Right to face Punk at Backlash for the MITB briefcase. Armando Estrada has an announcement, Shelton Benjamin vs Kofi Kingston and our Main Event is Kane Vs elijah Burke.

Be sure to tuned in to this 1 hour of ECW only of sci-fi

Kane versus Elijah Burke is a good match for the ME. Hopefully it turns up better then mine were Chavo, Burke and Benjamin just beat him down. Good luck In will be reading.

Edgehead9812 · 04-25-2008, 10:33 PM

Yeah, well its a storyline advancer so dont expect to much.

WWE NEWS!

A massive signing will appear on smackdown, watch smackdown to find out who it will be.

Edgehead9812 · 04-26-2008, 01:13 AM

ECW

Side note for Ecw commentary, I will not be making Adamle look like a botch freak.

*Pyro hits as ECW'S music plays, Camera Pans Around the screaming crowd at MSG*

Mike: Welcome to ECW on Sci-fi, Tonight we are live from Maddison Square Garden and This will be one hell of a night Tazz.
Tazz: Thats for sure Mike, tonight Our General manager Aramando Estrada Makes a Huge decision and a massive main event involving elijah Burke and Kane.
Mike: Also morrison has a chance to face Cm punk at Backlash for the MITB Briefcase.

Chimel: The following contest is scheduled for one fall, If John Morrison wins he faces Cm punk at Backlash for the MITB briefcase.

*Papparazi plays*

John Morrison walks to the ring with a great ammount of confidence.

Mike: John morrison looking to have a chance to earn a title shot anywhere in the next year, Tazz, do you believe the Tuesday night Delight can do it?
Tazz: Yes i believe he can do it, he has done everything right by weakening up Cm punk before this match, he is a good chance tonight.

*This fire burns Plays*

Cm punk walks to the ring with bandages on his back from where Morrison attacked him.

Ending

Punk with a right hand, Punk starting to build back momentum, goes for a clothes line but oh! Wicked Backbreaker/neckbreaker Combination by Morrison, hook of the leg, 1...2..shoulder up. Morrison now Puts Punk in a surfboard type submission move retargetting the back. Punk now starts to get his way out of his, Morrison with a right hand, Irish whips Punk to the turnbuckle, Punk sticks his leg out but Morrison Grabs it, Punk with the enzuigiri! The ref starts counting as both men are down. 1.....2.....3.....4.....5.....6...

Mike: Turning point in the match!

Punk and Morrison both starting get up, Punk with a clothesline and another and another, now punk picks up Morrison and irish whips him, Punk hits a back body drop and waits for morrison to get back up. Morrison back up and then Punk with a kick to the leg, then to the ribs then a huge spinning kick to the head, cover, 1...2..Shoulder up! Punk irish whips Morrison to the corner, hits the knee into a bulldog, punk ready to go for a springboard clothesline, Morrison gets up but he pushes the ref into the ropes just of Punk gets onto them! Punk is out! Morrison goes to the top turnbuckle, Split leg Moonsault, Pin, 1...2...3! Match Time: 14:34

*Papparazi plays*

Chimel: And the winner of this match, John Morrison!

Morrison Runs back up the ramp celebrating while Punk is lying in the ring looking shocked as we go to a commercial

*commercial*

Backstage Interview

Lena Yada: Right now i am here with John Morrison, John that was a grueling match you just had CM punk but you managed to escape with victory, you will now be heading to backlash to face him for the number 1 contendership for the title.

Morrison: Lena, lets get one thing straight, The tuesday night delight did not escape with victory, he dominated the whole match and could have won at any time, i just felt like giving CM Punk a chance that he could win.

Lena Yada: In all fairness John, You did cheat to win.

Morrison: * gives her a disgusted look and walks out *

Tazz: Looks like Morrison aint to happy about being accused of cheating *mini laugh*

*Ain't No stoppin plays*

Shelton Benjamin comes down to the ring

Mike: These two could easily be future ECW Champions right here Tazz

Tazz: Yeah, two talented young stars looking to pick up the win here tonight

*S.O.S plays*

Kofi Kingston Comes down to the ring

Ending

Kofi Kingston has a version of a sleep on Benjamin, Benjamin is fighting his way up, Benjamin with an elbow and another elbow, Benjamin bounces off the ropes but runs straight into a spinning wheel kick. Kofi picks up Benjamin and irish whips him into the corner, Kofi Runs at him but Benjamin throws him onto the apron, Kofi with a shoulder block to Benjamins gut, Kofi with a spring board crossbody but Benjamin counters it into a Samoan Drop! Benjamin is crawling over for a cover, 1...2..shoulder up.

Benjamin Picks Kofi up and irish whips in to the ropes and hits a powerslam, pin, 1...2..shoulder up. Benjamin picks kofi up but kofi Breaks away, Double legs take down into mounted punches by Kofi, Kofi gets up and hits his double leg drop! Pin, 1...2..shoulder up, Kofi Picks up benjamin and goes for a suplex, countered by Benjamin into a go behind, Benjamin nows lifts up Kofi for an Electric Chair drop! Cover

Tazz: That should be all!

1...2..shoulder up

Mike: No!, Kofi still fighting strong

Benjamin Picks Kofi up and irish whip, Benjamin with the back body drop but no! Kofi lands on his feet and clotheslines Shelton. He goes to the Apron Waiting for Shelton to get up, Sheltons up and a seated senton by kofi, instead of going for the pin he starts punching Benjamin in the face, Kofi Picks Benjamin up, goes for the spinning Enzuigiri, misses, Benjamin with a bridge! 1...2...3.!! Match Time: 17:23

*Ain't no stopping plays*

Chimel: And the Winner of this bout, Shelton Benjamin!

*commercial*

Mike: We're back from the commercial break and now ECW's GM, Armando Estrada, Is in the ring about to make his announcement.

Estrada: Es! Ucho! For those that have forgotten, my name is Armannnndao, Alehannnnndro, Estraddddddddddda.

Estrada: In ECW we have had uhh lets say a 1 title for to long.

Estrada: Starting next week, eh mucho, their will be a tournament to determine who will be the newly revived ECW TV champion

Estrada: This will be a 4 man tournament consisting of el much uhh, Shelton Benjamin, Kofi Kingston, Matt striker and Elijah Burke.

*ECW originals Music plays*

Tommy Dreamer, Nunzio, Balls Mahoney and Stevie richards are all standing at the entrance under the titantron.

Tommy: How dare you make a TV title tournament with not one of the originals in it, we gave our lifes to ECW and this is what we get rewarded with??

Estrada: *Nods with a big grin*

Tommy: We are the heart and soul of ECW, we demand you put us In the Tournament or we will make you.

Estrada: Uhh Let me thinkm about that, uhh No! * Big Grin again *

Tommy: Balls, teach him a lesson

Balls walks down to the ring with a chair chasing away Estrada,

Estrada(still puffing): Ok ok, you are in the tournament. And also one thing, the final match at Backlash will be under, uhh lets say , Extreme Rules! * big Grin again *

Mike: Wow! Tazz, you were an ECW original, Do you think its was right what they did right then.

Tazz: You bet your ass they were, they made ECW and they get rewarded with nothing, without them their wouldnt be this title, i think its only fair.

*commercial*

*slow chemical plays as kanes pyro comes up*

Kane walks down to the ring with his new ECW title:

Chimel: On the way to the ring, he is the ECW champion, Kane!

*video package of highlights from the battle royal, then shows kane winning the ECW world championship*

As we come back from the video we see Elijah already in the ring and his name announced.

Ending

Elijah burke has kane set up in the turnbuckle, elijah hits a huge clothesline! Elijah then hits a nice suplex on kane, hook of the leg, 1...2..shoulder up by kane. Elijah picks kane up, irish whips kane, kane off the ropes, goes for a clothesline but elijah burke blocks it and hits his clothesline leg sweep combo. Pin, 1...2..shoulder up. Elijah picks up kane and irish whips him to the corner, Elijah throws a right hand but Kane blocks it, kane switches elijah to the corner and hits a right, a left a right, a right, a left, a right and a huge right! Kane scares the ref off before irish whiping elijah to the oposite corner, kane with a huge clothesline, kane goes up to the top turnbuckle, kane goes for a top rope clothesline..

*Chavito Ardiente plays*

Tazz: Whats this! Thats Chavos music but wheres chavo!

Elijah regains stableness, hits kane with a few rights while his on the turnbuckle, nails a superplex, cover, 1...2...3! Match time: 11:13

*Sylvester Turkay 3rd plays*

Chimel: The winner of this match, Elijah burke.

Mike: What a huge upset! great way to finish ECW here at MSG!

Tazz: Your right Mike. elijah will have momentum going into the Ecw tv title tournament with a huge win like that.

Mike: hey wait whats this.

Chavo runs through the crowd and beats down kane with a steel chair, chavo grabs the Mic.

Chavo: Just to let you know Kane, my rematch clause has been invoked and i will be getting my rematch at Backlash.

*End of ECW

KK thats ecw for yah. If your thinking what that mucho and uh uh stuff is with Estrada, its just trying to stay in charatcer.

Dantastic · 04-26-2008, 07:33 AM

Here is an ECW review for you

. I hope it is helpful.

CM Punk vs. John Morrison – A good match time and a good stipulation. It’s a good feud to set up for Backlash with the prospect of a really entertaining match at the PPV. There was good back and forth action in the match, so it is not obvious who was going to win, and it was a nice way to win with the split leg moonsault as well. Good job.

Kofi Kingston vs. Shelton Benjamin – Again, a good quality match that will entertain many ECW fans. I really like the idea of Shelton countering Kofi’s springboard cross body into a Samoan drop – that would be great to see in reality. It was a decent match time as well – it gives plenty of time for a lot of action. The match of the night for me.

Armando Estrada Promo – Again you are showing signs of a great storyline writer with the arrival of the ECW Television Championship. I like the angle with the ECW Originals, and it was a nice comment by Tazz at the end. Furthermore, I think you got Armando Estrada fully in character. Well done. The promo just needs lengthening.

Main Event – You are showing signs to script good matches, but I think the finish to the match was a little disappointing. I don’t think Kane will have stayed down for a 3-count for a superplex as not many wrestlers do. It doesn’t help Kane’s credibility of being ECW Champion much. A surprising win is nice to see though, and it is good that you are building Elijah Burke up.

Overall: The matches were very good and you are showing signs to be a great storyline writer. However, I still think you need to lengthen your promos and need to add a couple of backstage segments to help build up the matches.

Rating: 7.5/10

Edgehead9812 · 04-26-2008, 10:05 AM

Superplexs were once very very lethal my friend. And thanks again, ill rep you when i spread some.

Edgehead9812 · 04-26-2008, 06:35 PM

Smackdown Preview

We Have the Return of superstar, Jamie noble will be action against Gregory Helms, Undertaker will be facing Batista, MVP will make an announcement regarding to Backlash, Jesse and Festus take on Shannon Moore and Jimmy wang yang and its the eturn of Teddy Long.

Tune in to see what happens, only on Smackdown