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**RKO** · 09-01-2008, 06:10 AM

RKO's Smackdown Review

Lashley/Flair segment: Well nice build up there but it was too unrealistic in my opinion. Bobby Lashley was well out of character and so was Brock Lesnar. Ric Flair was alright but could've done a little better. Just need to work on promos like I do lol.

MNM/Hooligans: Nice match there, it's quite a length but the match was not boring at all. The ending was alright too.

MNM segment: Nothing much to say but the name is a bit stupid lol.

Rock/Noble segment: Not that great tbh. I did like it kind of since Noble and the Rock were in it but the Rock didn't seem that much in character and Noble should go against more rather than always saying same things.

Khali/Noble: Well it's a squash.

WWE Draft announcement segment: Well why couldn't this have been said with the newest wrestler coming out because it was very short and we all knew there would be a draft.

Flair/Lashley backstage: I am really confused by this fued since I forgot in the previous shows so what the heck happened between Flair,Lashley and Lesnar?

Elimination match: It started out not well but gradually became interesting. Good choice of winner and I liked the aftermath when Sabin ran up then Wang came.

Flair/Lesnar: Can't believe Flair was dominated by Lesnar the whole match! Anyway great ending, I was expecting this to happen but you made it more better with Lashley spearing him.

US Title match: What a fun read! I loved this match all the way through since it is a street fight. I liked the ending where RVD frog splashed Kennedy through a table and RVD having the title is great!

Taker promo: It was an okay promo to hype their match next and also the Unforgiven match too.

Main Event: Another great match. Umaga leaving Cena and doing the Samoan Spike on him was good and I also like how Batista was working well with Taker. The Last Ride FTW!!!

Overall: An average show to say the least and I enjoyed the matches more than your promos. There were lots of grammar mistakes and spelling mistakes. 6/10. Sorry for the low score but you will improve mate and I know it.

**ThunderMan** · 09-01-2008, 07:00 AM

I have to say that I was not a big fan of the opening promo. All three men seemed out of character and it was all a bit confusing as to what was going. Flair lacked any charisma and enegry he usualy has. It looks like you have changed Lashley's character completely there. On the good side of things we get a Brock/Flair match coming up.

Match 1: Tag openers are always the best way to open up a show. Goo too see the heels take the win as it makes it a little more unpredictable. Good finish and a nice spot. Keeping it clean also put over MNM.

Promo: Ahh man, there was no need for it, MMM?? wtf! Just have him as Nitro already.

Promo: The Rock was not his usual self, A lack of Rock catchphrases and he tried to be funny but imo, he failed.

Match 2: poor Noble. Seems like just IRL, all these BTB'ers are jobbing him out! Meh, Noble should have beat Khali

. Nah, really though it was a squash and served little purpose.

Vince Promo: This could have all been done in the back. It seems silly to bring him out in the middle of the show just to say two lines.

Promo: I didn't understand this, what on earth is Ric talking about.

Match 3: Another neckbreaker finish here. I liked this match, but I felt that two double teams to eliminate the 1st two was cheeky. You should have come up with a different to get rid of one of them. Good solid match though.

Match 4: Lesnar FTW! he is really a machine in this BTB which I love. Lashley/Flair is being built up alot on this show, but I hope now its the end for today as I am fed up fo reading about them two.

Kennedy promo seemd out of character, but I liked the way he was talking to himself.

Match 5: Shocker! New Champion and RVD takes the gold, wooo! My only thing I did not like was that RVD had a lot of help from Hardy

. It does make RVD look slightly weak as champ. But when Kennedy is your MITB holder, he needs to look strong as he is future main eventer.

Promo: I was about to slaughter your ass for the Taker promo, then realised he was American Bad Ass

. So great promo here.

Main Event
Good main event, however you need to mix your sentences up. It was like "batista this.... Umaga then.... Umaga then..... Batista did..... " It seemed rush as well.

Promo: Hmm, SD! went off the air, then Umaga was drafted. That just seemed really weird. Becareful how you put things down on paper and in what order as I take it SD! was still on the air at that time

Overall 65/100 - Your matches were helluva lot better than the promos. Your Taker promo bumps you up some marks too. Watch some WWE TV and pick up on what the wrestlers say and what type of vocabulary they use.

deuces · 09-01-2008, 09:33 AM

Thanks guys. I like honesty and I agree that I had some grammar and vocabulary mistakes, I like the marks. I did rush SD, seeing as it was my first Smackdown, and I wanted to get it done quick. So thanks guys.

ryu · 09-02-2008, 06:32 AM

Thanks for the reviews guys really appreciated and yes Deuce did some mistakes but i think he will improve in his next shows and if Deuce listens then he could very well be a great booker in comng days. So deuce all the best to you in your next show and this one was good too but TBH i didnt liked some of the things.

**RKO** · 09-02-2008, 07:33 AM

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Originally Posted by ryu

Thanks for the reviews guys really appreciated and yes Deuce did some mistakes but i think he will improve in his next shows and if Deuce listens then he could very well be a great booker in comng days. So deuce all the best to you in your next show and this one was good too but TBH i didnt liked some of the things.

Well it was his first show and it is damn hard to catch up on all of your old shows so you got to give him credit for pulling this one off.

ryu · 09-07-2008, 08:01 AM

Third Week Monday Night RAW after WM 24

Monday Live from Albany, New York

*To Be Loved* is being played.

*PYRO*
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*Fans cheer as RAW goes live on television*

JR: Welcome to Monday Night RAW and tonight I tell you is going to be one good night!

King: I know JR! We will have so many things that will change possibly Raw forever!

JR: We are three weeks gone from the biggest event of them all that I can tell you, things are heated up for the show! You do not know what is gonna come next.

King: That’s why RAW is one heck of a show! You would not know what might happen next!

1)CM Punk vs Santino (Stipulation match: If Santino Wins he gets a ticket to Backlash and gets himself a shot for the IC Title and if he looses then he will not be at Backlash)

It has been a good back and forth match between these two as both is trying hard to get the win. In the end. Santino has Punk in a sleeper hold and Punk is trying to fight back as Punk finally gets himself out of the Sleep Hold and hit some elbows to Santino mid-section as he then whips Santino into the ropes and connects with the half calf kick. Both men are down and the ref starts counting. On 7 both get to their feet slowly and Santino goes for a right hand but Punk blocks and unleashed with his strikes of fury. Punk then whips him into the corner and charges with a hard running shining wizard followed by bulldog. Punk is fire up as the fans cheers for him. Punk signals for the Go To Sleep and just as Santino gets to his feet and Punk lifts him up for his finisher but from the back Shelton comes running to the ringside and get on the apron and Punk gets Santino off his shoulder and goes running to Shelton and hits a right hand to him knocking him out of the ring apron but from behind Santino quickly rolls him up and holding his tights as the ref covers for the three count.

Winner: Santino Marella

Aftermath: Punk cant believe it that he has lost to Santino as outside Shelton looking at Punk and smiles at him as he leaves while Santino quickly goes outside and celebrates as he has won the IC Title. He hugs with few fans and goes crazy jumping around as Punk looks in dis believe.

***Commercial***

2)Divas Tag Team Match
Mickie & Candice vs Victoria and Jillian

Before the match could start a video footage is been shown of last week in which Mickie accidentally hits her partner Candice with the Chick Kick. Later, Mickie then enters Candice locker room and apologizes her for wht she did but Candice in anger slaps her then leaves as mickie looks in dis believe.

In the end, Jillian is working on Candice back as Mickie trying to motivate Candice. Jillian then whips her into the ropes and hits a side buster. Jillian covers but Mickie saves the match. Jillian then tags Victoria and both then double teams Candice with a double suplex. Victoria covers but gets a two count. Victoria then does her shaking move and hits a moonsault on Candice. Victoria covers but again gets a close two count. Victoria then whips her into the ropes and goes for a clothesline but Candice gets out of the way and hits a drop kick to Victoria as Victoria goes crashing into the turnbuckle. Candice then slowly crawls toward her partner as Victoria goes to tag Jillian. Candice is moving slowly as she is holding her back in pain as Jillian gets the tag and Candice goes to tag Mickie but in the last second, Mickie steps back as she looks in anger towards Candice. Candice has a shock look on her face as Jillian hits a elbow drop on her back then both Victoria and Jillian hits double DDT to Candice and covers her for the three count.

Winner: Victoria and Jillian

Aftermath: Victoria and Jillian raise their hand as they leave while Mickie holding her Womens Title gets in the ring with a mic. Candice who is laying on the mat. Mickie stands over Candice and grabs her from her hair and says to her: Never ever in your life Slap me again because this was just the trailer of what can i do if you slap me again. Candice i will make your life a living hell if you SLAP me again. Mickie then slaps Candice twice before raising her Title high in the air as he laughs while the crowd chants YOU SUCK.

Backstage Santino is extremely happy as he is looking for Shelton. Finally he see Shelton coming out of his locker room and Santino approches Shelton.

Santino: Thank You very much for your help in my match tonight. Mr Shelton Benjaminnn.

Shelton: Listen boy, I didnt do a favour to you instead i had my own personal business with him so no thank you.

Santino: I dont care if you did a favour to me or not because you know wht? You will do me a favour again at Backlash.

Shelton : What. WHat favour?

Santino: You see Mr Shelton The Great Benjamin. since i won a ticket to BACKLASH and since IM now a part of the IC title match at Backlash so i want you to help me win the IC TITLE.

Shelton: WHat! are you serious? Look Santino Marell what ever your name is. Come Backlash its everyman for himself and i dont care if its you or Carlito or CM PUNK the only man that will walk out of BACKLASH as the new IC CHAMPION will be me the GOLD STANDARD SHELTON BENJAMIN.

Santno: That is very rude of you and you will pay for it if you do anything stupid with Santino Marella.

Shelton: What ever as he leaves wearing his shades again

Santino: You will pay for this you stupid. No one says one To the great Santino Marella.

***Commercial***

3)Burke got drafted to Raw last week
Elijah Burke vs Tommy dreamer

Burke is looking very impressive in his 1st match on raw as he has been dominating the match. In the end, Burke is working on Dreamer back as Burke hits a couple of knees. Burke then whips him in the ropes and goes for a suplex but Tommy from nowhere gets burke in a small package for a close two count. Burke then goes a quick clothesline but Tommy again ties his hands with Burke and gets him on his back and again gets him in the pin fall as again he gets a two count. Burke then goes for a right hand but Tommy blocks and hits a couple of right hands and whips him into the ropes and hits a high back drop. Tommy gets pumped up as he hits a series of clothesline. Tommy then hits a pile driver and goes to the top. Tommy goes for the flying elbow but Burke gets out of the way as Tommy goes crashing on the mat. Burke quickly hits Tommy with his Elijah Experience. burke covers and gets the three count.

Winner: E.Burke

Aftermath: Burke celebrates his victory then gets a mic.

Burke: Thank you for all the love you gave me but the fans are still booing him.

Burke: Never mind. This was just a trailer of what i can do with better men in the ring with me. I demand respect and soon i will get your respect because ELIJAH BURKE is here to stay for ever still gets load of boos from the crowd.

Backstage Todd is with DX

Todd: HHH and HBK what are your thoughts on not having a match at the loaded PPV of BACKLASH?

HBK gets in HHH face and says let me answer that one. HHH sure.

HBK: A PPV is incomplete without DX being in it so since their is no match of DX at BACKLASH and since their is seriously no one to fight with DX so me and Hunter were thinking taking time off at BACKLASH.

HHH erupts.: You know Shawn, i have a better idea. MMM lets say we will interfere in those match which we fill is boring like like like we will see it when it comes.

HBK: That's a hell of a idea. GOD why didn't i think of that.

Todd: So what you guys are saying is that DX will be at Backlash but not in match instead you both will interfere in any boring match?

Both answers at the same time: YES and if your not down with that then we got two words for ya along with the crowd" SUCK IT".

***Commercial***

4)Bret Hart first Match in WWE after 11 Years
Bret Hart w/Y2J vs Val Venis

Before the match could start, Kurt Angle music hits and he makes his way to the ringside and gets a chair and sits right in front on the announcing table to witness Bret Hart match very closely. Jericho points to Angle do not even think about interfering.

Bret Hart looks a bit slower with his moves and skills as He is trying hard to get a win. In the end, Val venis has Bret in the camel clutch as Bret is trying to get out of it as the whole arena along with Y2J cheers and chants for Bret Hart. Bret then gets close to the ropes and eventually Bret makes it to the ropes. Val venis then talks trash as he lifts Bret up for the suplex but Bret blocks and instead hits a suplex of his own. Bret then slowly tries to get to his feet holding the ropes as Val venis goes running to Bret but Bret ducks and pulls the ropes down as Val venis goes flying outside the ring and landing on Kurt Angle. Ref checks on Bret as outside angle looks mad as he punches Val venis a couple of times then sends him crashing to the steel steps in frustration. Y2J smiles then sends Val back to the ring. Bret then hits his famous russian leg sweep followed by a flying elbow drop from the top turnbuckle. Bret Goes for the Legendary Sharp Shooter and he locks it on Val who in no time taps out as Bret releases the lock after some time

Winner: Bret The Hitman Hart

Aftermath: The whole arena is on their feet to cheer for the legendary BRET HART and their hero. Y2J gets in the ring and embraces Bret Hart as he raises Bret hand in the air. Bret celebrates then looks at Angle who on outside applauds for Bret Hart. Bret then gets a mic and says to Angle.

Bret: It felt great to be back in the ring after a long long time. He then thanks all of his fans and co-workers for the support he got. Bret then tells to Angle. Kurt Angle "I Accept Your challenge to a match at BACKLASH.

Kurt Angle gets a smile on his face as he leaves while Bret Celebrates and it looks like Y2J didn't liked the idea of Bret accepting Angle challenge.

Jr and King talks about Bret Hart.

Jeff Hardy music hits as he makes his way to the ring with a happy look on his face as he slaps some hands with the fans.
Jeff gets in ring as he does his pose to the crowd and receive big pop from the crowd. Jeff gets a MIC

Jeff: You know why IM so happy because take a look at this. Play the footage.

A video footage is shown of Last Friday Night Smackdown.

Its US Champ Kennedy vs RVD for the US TITLE.

Kennedy is waiting for RVD to get to his feet but from the crowd Matt Hardy gets on the apron and distracts the ref while Jeff from other hand comes to the ring and hits the Twist of Fate on Kennedy and RVD then gets to the top turnbuckle and hits 5 Star Frog Splash as RVD wins the US Title.

Jeff: It felt so good to take ravenge and Mr.Kennedy "Payback is a Bitch". So next time you better dont interfere in our business. And wait a min. I have been hearing rumours that Mr.Kennedy has issued a challenge to the Hardy Boys to a Tag Team Match at Backlash so Mr.Kennedy i dont care who your partner is and i dont care what plans you have but me and behalf of my brother Matt who couldnt make it here tonight due to some perosnal reasons so i accept your challenge.

crowd cheers as Jeff music hits he makes his way to the back.

***Commercial***

Jerry Lawler gets in the ring and announces the second draft pick to Raw from Smackdown So lets see who it is.

After sometime

***I Love to Fight*** hits and Finlay along with HW make their way to the ring as they get massive pop from the crowd.

Both enters the ring and shake hands with Lawler and pose to the crowd.

King: Welcome to Raw Finlay and HW.

Finlay: Thank you and thank you to all the fans. You know it feels great to be on Raw. I was very upset on smackdown because to be honest there was no one tough enough to fight with Finlay so im glad i got drafted to Raw and as you all know I love to fight and im here to Fight the best.

Finlay music hits as he thanks the crowd and leaves as HW clap hands with some fans.

Backstage Austin is shown talking on his phone as his room door is slightly open and the camera man try to go inside his room but Austin while talking on the phone shuts the dooor.

8 Man Tag Team Match
Randy Orton- SandMan- Sabu and Kane vs Edge- Christian- M.Hassan and Mick Foley w/Davari

It has been a hell of ride so far with all eight members tearing each other apart just to get the win but uptill now, no one is able to beat his opponent for the three count or had submit. In the end. Foley is beating up Sabu in the corner as Foley hits the running knee to Sabu in the corner. Foley covers but Sandman just breaks the pin in the time saving the match for his team. Foley then tags in Edge who then slaps Sabu right in face follwed by a smile on his face as he talks trash to Orton. Edge then whips Sabu in the ropes and Sabu slides between Edge legs and comes back with a tornado ddt to Edge as both are on the ground. the ref is on 8 as both make the tag as Sabu tags Kane and Edge tags Christian. Kane comes in and unleash hell on Christian and other memebers of their team. Kane then goes to the top and waits for Christian to get up as Christian gets to his feet and Kane goes for the flying clothesline but Christian gets out of the way and Kane then quickly gets up and turns around only to get Speared by EDGE. This leads other members of Kane team to come out and all hell break loose. Orton beats up Edge and sends him outside as sandman takes out Foley to the outside followed by M.Hassan. All are fighting outside the ring as in the ring Sabu runs and hits the springboard moonsault outside the ring and Sabu lands on all members outside the ring. This leads to a big pop from the crowd. In the ring Christian goes for his finisher but Kane whips him in the ring and connects with the big booot. Kane signals for the Chokeslam and just as Christian gets to his feet, Kane hits him with the Chokeslam while outside the ring. Orton hits the RKO on Hassan as Edge Spears Sabu right into the steel steps and Foley and Sandman are fighting between the crowd. In the ring Kane covers Christian for the three count.

Winner: kane- Orton- Sabu and Sandman.

Aftermath: The fight is still going on outside as Kane after celebrating his vicroty goes outside the ring to help his team mates but unfortunately for him, Kane is hit a chair shot to the knee from Edge who then hits the chair shot to Orton aswell and Hassan joins him and takes out Sandman and Sabu with the kendo stick and Foley then hits his mandible claw to Sandman. Team Rated R superstars goes back in the ring as they recieve huge heat from the crowd. Team Rated R superstars raise their hands in celebration despite loosing their match.

show goes off the air.

**Hoopstar** · 09-07-2008, 02:07 PM

Raw Feedback

The stipulation for this match seems interesting enough. Dunno who the IC Champ is, tho. There are some grammar errors throughout, affecting the flow. The finish was a good way to put Santino AND Shelton over, but if you're going to push Santino, give him a credible finisher.

There probably should've been a segment here. It feels like you're trying to rush through the show by not including a segment here, which isn't good. Take your time is what I always tell people. Good to see some tension building between divas. Mickie as a heel is pretty sexy, as long as she's psycho, so if you're gonna lead her down that heel path, turn her into a super psychopath, and you're guaranteed ratings.

Good to see a segment. Major spelling errors, really hurts you a lot. The segment itself was alright, but again, it's spelling that brings down the flow. Refer to it as the Intercontinental Title, not the IC Title please.

There was a draft? None-the-less, I'm a fan of Burke's potential, get him on a good roll here please. Tommy Dreamer might as well be called Tommy Jobber, that's pretty much all he does. Please do more with him than help push the young stars. He's capable of so much more.

Why do you keep putting Backlash as BACKLASH? Interview was bland, imo. Not much to say.

WHOA WHOA WHOA. Slow down a second. Bret Hart fighting on Raw ... AGAINST VAL VENIS?!! Tell me this isn't happening? I think it's great that you bring Bret back and want to do something with him, but if you bring him back, it should be a huge feud with Vince or Shawn that leads up to his in-ring return match at one of the big four. I'm sorry, this is just some terrible booking right here. Now Bret/Angle will be a show stealer, if written right, but this match was just horrible booking, unfortunately.

Short segment in the ring that really could've been an interview segment or whatever. Not very good.

A fairly good main event with some big stars. The match itself was alright, but it wasn't really anything special.

Overall, the show was too short, and pretty bad. I don't wanna be harsh, but that's how it's gonna be if you want real criticism. You come across as a lazy booker, which doesn't make for an enjoyable read at all. The booking needs a bit of work, but it's there for the most part. Now you need to work on your writing, and if you do that, you'll be on the right track in no time.

WWE_kane4EVA · 09-07-2008, 02:22 PM

Match One

efinatly good to see you didnt make it a clean pin for a punk more of a comical dirty pin for santino 8/10.

Match two:Great match i personally love victoria and mickie and always thought they were great combonation in the ring 7.5/10.

Match three: this seemed like you through it in quickly to get Elijah his first win 6.5/10.

match four:This match was great it definatly opens up a long awaited dream match plus great use of Y2J 9/10.

Main Event:Good match but bret hart vs val venis was more of a main event for me anyways 7.5.

OVERALL: 8.5/10

Good Show just main event wasnt all that MAIN EVENTY.

**RKO** · 09-07-2008, 02:49 PM

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Originally Posted by WWE_kane4EVA

Match One

efinatly good to see you didnt make it a clean pin for a punk more of a comical dirty pin for santino 8/10.

Match two:Great match i personally love victoria and mickie and always thought they were great combonation in the ring 7.5/10.

Match three: this seemed like you through it in quickly to get Elijah his first win 6.5/10.

match four:This match was great it defi

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