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Lashley™ · 05-22-2008, 02:57 PM

Hey man, just wanted to say I will have a review up tomorrow night. SmackDown is up in my thread if you wanna check it out.

bigjohnnynitro · 05-23-2008, 08:01 AM

BJN's Smackdown review

Opening promo was pretty good, a little bland and a little rushed for me, got the point across though, cena vs batista 2 at backlash. Should be a good main event but I think Batista will come out on top again

Next was a triple threat match, some good wrestlers in here so i expected a good wrestling match, and to was to an extent but what i would like to see is you adding more excitement to the match, as i was reading there was no excitement getting generated throughout the match, it was just like reading a few paragraphs, I would recommend adding !! at times to big moves and finishers. You could count the pins like

1.......................

2.........................

3............................

No!!! Kick out by AJ STYLES!! Just before the three

just adds a little more and its quick to read gives the reader a break from long paragraphs

Next was the tag promo with the rock and it was a decent promo, had a couple of spelling mistakes in there that you might want tocheck for next and I think mercury's line about the sharphooter didnt really fit in, why would Rock be thinking of ways to get out of the sharpshooter?? anyway London and Kendrick come in and everyone seems to be close to character, nice match set up for next week and im hoping MNM come out on top

Next was the tag team rematch from the ppv, I like your tag team champions and it was pretty obvious that they were going to retain for me, bookr and finlay is a big of a strange tag team for me, I never really liked the kings court. The match itself was good, lots of action but again it needs a little excitement

Next up is a long promo from the undertaker, looks like you've went for the american badass gimmick which personally i preferred, nice promo in the end setting up a taker vs umaga fued, could be good depending on how u write it.

Next up was a handicap match and there was only going to be one winner here, MVP and Kennedy never looked like losing but this is the first of your shows I've read so I dont know why they are having this handicap, I'm sure I'll find out as i read a couple more of you're shos though!!

So on to the main event now, big mach here between two huge power superstars, Was a little bit short for me especially bein a main event, Ric Flair comes down and costs Lashley the match, Nice ending keeping both men strong, the fued could continue i guess. Flair's in trouble though and Lashley could drop him, maybe not though, I'll read next week to see what happens.

Ok overall I think you're matches are a little short wth them just beng endings, maybe invest some time on writing full matches at least for the big main events etc. The lashley vs lesnar match in particular was very short for such a huge match!! Also take my advice in adding excitement, add the counts to the pins and add !!! and maybe even caps on some moves just to generate excitement and build up to a good finish. The show was well written and the presentation was pretty damn good but work on generating excitement, I will give your show a 7 out of 10 with the thought of a couple thingsd could have been better

**MrMykalz™** · 05-23-2008, 09:10 AM

Smackdown! Review For S2H_Werd
Written On: May 23, 2008 @ 8:36 AM
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[Pre-Review Note]
Hey man, I just thought I'd drop in for a review. First thing I would like to comment on is your color consistency. Most people just throw in color to make it look good, and it doesn't work...but your consistency with having actions in brown, entrances in blue, and dialogue in green is commendable.

John Cena/Batista Promo
I see that you're booking John Cena as a heel, which I like. Seeing him booked as face is awfully predictable, and you can almost always expect the promos to be right on character, as the character kinda sucks. However, like I said, I like you having him heel because it allows you to explore different territory. Unfortunately, you didn't explore that territory, and Cena was just a typical heel here. The same goes for Batista...he was a typical face. Very disappointing concept wise, however, this was a pretty solid way to set up the match for Backlash. IMO, this could have gone on for a while longer, but you got the point across, thats all that matters. I don't usually rate segments of the show, but I'll start right now by giving this promo a 6/10.

3-Way Cruiserweight Match
Having Sabin and Styles in this match-up did a great deal for it, and adds a bit of credibility to the Cruiserweight Division (compare to the diminished division of the real WWE). I wasn't expecting Yang to pick up the win here, but he did...so that does add a big of unpredictability. Also during this match, I noticed that there were unnessesary amounts of run on sentences. You should, as Richie said, use more commas, and even a few periods. Good job in general though.

Nitro, Mercury, LondRick, and Rock Promo
This promo was well written, with both teams getting thier fair share of words in. Having the Rock interrupt with his classing line of "It Doesn't Matter!" added a bit of comedy to the promo, and I like the fact that he bounced right back into his role, and made the match for next week.

Tag Title Match
This was a pretty solid match. There isn't much more to say about it. I kinda expected Mysterio and Chavo to win it, but I didn't see the way they won coming. Usually, this is done with face teams, but I like what you're doing with Finlay and Booker. The only dispute I have with this is that I really couldn't see Finlay trying to apologize to Booker. Finlay is much too kickass for that, but I suppose its ok if they're breaking up. Perhaps they're out of the way for good?

Undertaker, Umaga, Estrada Promo
To be honsest, Undertaker was WAY out of character here, even for the Badass gimmick. I really wasn't feeling him here, as he talked a tad too much. Most of it was just yapping off with no aim. I like Estrada and Umaga coming in, and thier encounter kinda saved the promo from being a total flop. And afterwards, I didn't see the need for a commercial break here. We just came back from a commercial break, and this promo was much too small to fill the spot before the next one.

Handicap Match
Before the match you had Jeff Hardy taken out. I actually liked that, but the excitement over that kinda went away when Jeff came down in the middle of the match, and the two still lost. Either way, this is good, and here's why: It would have made more sense to have the Hardyz win, because that would help to put them over as the ultimate determined faces...however, having them lose provides an extra amount of unpredictability, despite what you already had by having Hardy come down in the first place. Good job on this one, no real disputes here.

Lashley/Flair Promo
Wow, I didn't read the Wrestlemania, but this promo gives me a real feel for what happened. I have to admit, I'm not too big on Flair and Lashley together, but this promo went amazingly well, with Lashley rejecting Flair's assistance. I wouldn't be surprised if ol Flair helped out anyway...but we'll have to see.

RVD/Kennedy Promo
After yet another unnessecary commercial break, we have a pretty solid promo from RVD and Kennedy here. Kennedy's arrogance was displayed well here, and RVD's character was well captured as well. The only thing I didn't like about this is the fact that you had RVD drinking coffee in the beginning. I couldn't see RVD drinking coffee. Maybe something like a Red Bull or a Gatorade would've worked a bit better for the character.

The Main Event!
Ok, this was a pretty basic match between two powerhouses. What do you know!! Here comes Flair towards the end and once again causes Lashley the match. The aftermatch definitely signals the end of the two's alliance, which I have no problem with. However, this would've been alot more effective if the thing with Booker/Finlay didn't happen earlier in the night.

OVERALL:
This was a pretty good show with some solid booking. I respect your desire and your talents alike, and with a little work, you will get much more attention and tons more reviews. The only things I would suggest is that you watch some YouTube videos of Badass Taker before putting him on the mic again. Also, watch your grammar, spelling, and punctuation. All in all, great show, and I'll give it a 7/10.

Lashley™ · 05-23-2008, 12:36 PM

Heres the review my friend as promised, although a little late. Ryu, I checked over your RAW too, by the way.

Lashley™'s Late SmackDown Review

Best Match: Matt Hardy v MVP and Mr. Kennedy, Why? Because I love these three guys so much, seriously! Also, what makes it even more better is that you had Kennedy and MVP win! Mark out!

Liked the finish with Jeff Hardy trying to help his brother, but Kennedy still managed to win it.

Worst Match: N/A - Wasn't one in my opinion.

Best Promo: The promo before my favorite match, seeing Jeff just lying there was pretty cool and Matt shouting for help. Kennedy saying it wasn't him has me thinking who the hell could of dunnit? Maybe Kennedy is just shifting the blame?

Worst Promo: Erm...Yet again I really could see one that I thought I hated.

Additional: Awesome SmackDown S2H, Ryu, I checked over your RAW aswell and there was good stuff there too! You two are really good bookers. And have made me a follower, expect a review for the next show, I promise. Just wanna point out I love the colors makes it so easy to read. Show rating, 8.4/10

ryu · 05-23-2008, 03:06 PM

Thanks for all the reviews mate,really appreciated. You all did took some time to review back but its ok afterall and as for the matches well My partner is new to btb so give him sometime and im sure he will be great as he is but just need some more work before he gets much better and just to tell you all we both discuss our shows and both then post raw and smkdown after our discussion on what mathes should take place and promos so its not like i post raw only and my partner posts smkdown only. No we aint like that we do it slightly different anyway thanks for the reviews and hopefully in next shows it all will be great and as for next week raw.

It will be time to shake things up as Vince will make a appeareance after a long time to WWE Raw so please chekc it out.

**Mister Mister** · 05-24-2008, 05:49 AM

MR.JohnnyECW's Smackdown Review

Opening Promo/ Really well done, Batista segment was good. Backlash match was awesome, Tista and Cena is on. 8/10

First Match - CW Championship/ Excellent first match, can't wait for the reign of Wang Yang. Glad Chris' reign is over! 8/10

Rock-Estrada Promo/ Wonder what happened? 7/10

MNM-Londrick/ Well done this promo, Can't wait for the match next week. Hopefully London/Kendrick Wins. 7/10

Second Match- Tag Team Championship/ Good Match, had some really good points throughout the match, Glad Rey and Chavo retained. 8/10

Taker Promo/ Well done, the whole respect aspect was good. 8/10

Third Match- MVPvs.Mattvs.Kennedy/ Really good match, i would honestly have to call this MOTN imo. Good having MVP and Kennedy winning unlike the adverage Fairy tale ending of Matt winning, can't wait to see the fued continue. 9/10

Lashley-Flair Promo/ Adverage promo, just Flair apologising and telling him to get ready for the match. Nothing special but it was good how it went straight to the point. 6.5/10

RVD-Kennedy Promo/ THANK YOU!!!! these two actually will have a good match, lets hope RVD can get his belt back from Kennedy. 9/10

Main Event-LesnarVLashley/ Excellent Main Event. Lesnar one which was good because of Flair and having Lashley turn on him is gold. Lashley heel turn? 9/10

Overall: EXCELLENT SHOW, can't wait for next week with the US Title and Londrick vs. MNM = 8.5/10

ryu · 05-28-2008, 04:54 AM

Thanks for the review and RAW would be posted soon. SO check it out for more great action .

**RKO** · 05-28-2008, 05:42 AM

Sorry for the late Wrestlemania 24 review. It might be a bit short.

RKO777's Wrestlemania 24 Review

1st Promo: I think this is really good because it shows different superstars talking about what they want to achieve in wrestlemania. I also think that it is very original and I could see this happening in real life. Very good.

1st Match: MITB: This was quite good because the match is very good written and set out. Only thing I would say is that I would rather have MVP as my winner so that I can give him a push but still Mr.Kennedy is good. I liked how some of the other superstars who have competed before in one were competing again. I would like to read more and see when you will let Mr.Kennedy bank for a championship match.

2nd Promo: It was kind of short but great to see what Kennedy thought after the match. I like how you use very realistic storylines and I like that so very good.

2nd Match: Los Guerreros vs. Booker T and Finlay vs. MNM: This match I though was brilliant. Brilliantly written again and I think the winner was a good choice. I like how you did the triple threat tag match for this and when you wrote the match, it was really great to read as it did not bore me. Well done.

3rd Promo: Not the bestest of promos you've done today but it was alright. I think Mr.Kennedy is on this way too much and the Hardy Boyz were quite out of character and they did not speak much.

3rd Match: Brock Lesnar vs. Bobby Lashley: Again, brilliantly written and the length of the match was good too. It was pretty obvious that Lesnar would win and this was one of my favourite matches you've written.

4th Promo: This was again too short for me but it was not too bad as Orton was asked about his match with Edge. I think it was good about what he said but a bit longer would've been a bit better.

4th Match: Christian and Mick Foley vs. The Hardy Boyz: This match was very good and I can see a future fued happening involving Kennedy and the Hardys. I liked how Kennedy screwed them out of the championships and let the other team win. The stipulation was very good and the match itself was very different to what you would see in real life so well done.

5th Promo: This was the best promo I have read from you ever! I absolutely love the superstars you were using and it was really entertaining to watch. The 1st segment was really good as the Rock was in character and after that you used some good legends and I like the fact they started hitting each other. This would be really good if that happened in next wrestlemania. The last segment was also good with Kurt Angle ready for his next match. So this is promo of the night and possibly the best bit of the night!

5th Match: Kurt Angle vs. Chris Jericho: This was a classic match so I loved it. I liked it how you put Jericho over Angle and I can see Y2J being a really good contender for the championship. This match was done brilliantly like all your matches and I liked the ending how Angle was going to hit with the steel chair but couldn't. This was again very good.

6th Promo: This was very typical DX promo and I liked you using it. Very good hype to the match so it is a good promo.

6th Match: Edge vs. Randy Orton: Another very good match and it is good that Orton is the new champion. I liked it that you made it a No-DQ match and Foley and Christian coming out and using steel chairs was really good. The ending makes the whole match as the RKO done when Edge was doing a really good move was so good.

7th Promo: This was good when you used the fight between Mickie and Victoria, I wish you put more on it but oh well.

7th Match: Brothers of Destruction vs. Degeneration X: I really enjoyed watching this match. I thought it was really exciting to see all the way through the end because it was so brilliantly written. I liked the ending where HBK was alone and they both punched him then Taker did the tombstone.

8th Promo: I liked you showed the clip of Cena and Batista getting ready very original.

8th Match: John Cena vs. Batista: This was good but I prefer Cena to be champion and I thought the ending was quite poor because he rolled him up just like that by using no finishers. The rest of it was great to read though and having two new champions at the biggest event is always great.

9th Promo: I liked it that you had the two new champions at the end celebrating but it's just like what Benoit and Guerrero did but it's still good.

Overall: Promos: 8.5/10: They were good but some of them were way too short.
Matches: 10/10: I enjoyed every single match and it was a great read.
Show: 9.5/10: I loved it so I have to give it quite high mark.

ryu · 06-02-2008, 02:05 AM

Thanks for ur review mate,but im here to tell you all that my partner is not coming online for past 3 to 4 days and he hasnt replied to any of my messages so i dont know if anything is wrong with him, i hope everything is ok and sorry for not posting WWE RAW becoz im waiting for my partner cuz he has to post raw and i have tell him wht to do and how to so i just gota go through it before he posts so im waiting for him. So as soon as he comes back RAW will be posted and thanks for all the reviews.

**RKO** · 06-02-2008, 10:37 AM

Hey man I hope he is alright and continues the BTB with you and also my partner hasn't replied to my messages too but I think they both may be busy right now so give him just one more week and then see what you are going to do about it.

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