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i think if you add some color into this and make it a bit longer as well as make sure grammer is fine but i didn't see any problems and don't end segments without people leaving like that and such and it should be good hope this helps

ryu

thanks a lot for your comments guys and i really appreciated and as for the colours,i dont know how to use them if there is any easy way sure i will do it...and guyz the show is not finish yet......so hope you all like the show when it ends........thanks again for the comments....you made my day guyz

ryu

Raw Results:

jr:welcome to raw folks and what a night we had last night at summerslam..and tonight king vince has a major announcement to make...
king:yea jr im looking forward to what is vince announcement....

vince:here comes vince as vince makes his way to the ring..vince says tonight he has some real business to deal with and to make a major announcement..so its time to shake things up again..tonight it will be the first draft pick from smackdown....and later on tonight i will announce a new gm for raw..cena music hits....cena comes to the ring all angry..as cena gets in the ring.

jr:what a draft pick and a new gm all tonight.and what is cena doing here intefering vince mcmahon
king:im shock jr...a draft pick right after summerslam and a new gm who is it going to be..and cena coming out intefering vince mcmahon i hope vince doesnt minds it jr...

cena:cena tells vince i dont care what you have to say but i need justice around here and you saw what happened to me last night so i demand a rematch for the title.

vince:thats not the way you talk to vince mcmahon..and dammit i dont care what happened to you last night..you want a rematch no chance in helll..you know wht im gonna do..edge music hits as he walks down to the ring with lita at his side.

edge:shakes hands with vince..vince i really want to thanku for not giving cena the rematch for my wwe title..and last night at summerslam i again beat cena so there is no way in hell of cena getting a rematch..so i would like to hear vince what you had to say..please continue.

vince:usually edge i dont like to be intefered but i will continue so i was saying cena you wont get any rematch for the wwe title and tonight you will face..are you ready hits and out comes dx(hbk-hhh)

hhh:sorry vince for intefering again..but me and shawn thought that we should come out and have some little fun as we beat you last night at summerslam.

vince:why the hell are you guyz out here as you can see i have to deal with these 2 and then ill see you both.

hhh:you have to deal with cena-edge..i hope vince you are not making a deal about kissing each other's asss.

shawn:hunter you really think they are planning on kissing each other's ass....

edge:hey you 2 you dont come out here and disrespect vince and the wwe champion like that..you may have beaten vince but you 2 clowns cannot beat me.

hhh:shawn loook how hot lita is looooking...hey lita you come to dx for a night only and we will pay you 10 times more then what edge pays you...and edge you think you can beat us both so how about tonight its dx vs edge......rated R for Pimpstar........

cena:hey yo whoooooooooo..dx you want to fight edge but i want to fight him in a title match so i cant see its going to be dx vs edge but its going to be cena vs edge for the title...

vince:stop all of you..you all want each other so bad so it will be like this...right here tonight it will be a 6 man tag team match...it will be hhh-hbk-cena vs edge-randy orton and the big show..end of segment

jr:what a main event king..its going to be a huge main event........
kingfcourse jr..its going to be a great mainevent..first time in wwe history cena will team up with dx..whts gona happen tonight.....


1)carlito-cmpunk vs shelton bejamin-christian cage
finish:cage going for his unpreittier but carlito counters it in carlito back cracker...and on the outside cm punk has cage in his finish move lock...in the ring carlito covers cage for the 3 count....
winner:carlito-cmpunk

2)trish vs victoria
finish:trish knocks victoria for the stratus faction and gets the 3 count...
winer:trish stratus..mickie comes from behind and knocks out trish....she is beating the hell out of trish and dont no why..trish has been knocked out by mickie and she seems to like it......

hardcore match
3)balls mahoney vs test
finish:test is holding a trash can and test nails balls with it and test is setting him up for the pumphandleslam but ball counters it and hits the bck ddt..balls gets up and hits test with the steel chair and hits his finisher on test and gets the win...
winner:balls mahoney..mike knox comes from behind and knocks balls on the back by the kendo stick..and mike is trying to help his partner test....and outcomes sandman..sandman whoops the kendo stick on mike as he is bleeding from the head..sandman in the middle of the ring holding his hardcore title up in the air...from nowhere eugene comes up from behind and rolls sandman for the schoolpin and gets the 3 count and eugene is the new hardcore champion..eugene runs back to the back and leaves the building..sandman could not believe it he just lost the title to eugene that sandman won last night at summerslam..in a classic hardcore match

jr:what a upset king...eugene comming from nowhere and pins sandman for the 3count and becomes the new hardcore champion..sandman doest loooks happy...
king:what a foolish guy is eugene,i hope next week sandman gets his hands on eugene.....

one on one match with mangers at the both side
4)jeff with matt hardy vs kenny with ssquad..
finish:jeff hit the twist of fate on kenny and jeff is going for the swanton bomb on kenny but mikey-nikey-johny distracts the refree and mitch tries to push jeff of the turnbuckle but jeff fights back as matt comes from behind and takes out mitch and takes out the othe squad members as well outside the ring..in the ring jeff took somtime on the turnbuckle as keny gets up and punches jeff and gets on the turnbuckle as well.jeff and kenny both are on the turnbuckle and are fighting each other as jeff comes with rolling powerbomb on kenny and pins kenny for 3..
winner..jeff hardy..matt is been beaten down by ssquad members on the outside as jeff comes running with the splancha of the top of the ropes on the ssquad members except kenny..all the ssquad members are down as jeff and matt makes their way to the back.

jr:what a match we had king.and did you see that atheletic move by jeff hardy king.he took out all the ssquad members.what a amazing victory for jeff hardy.
king:yea jr i saw the move it was great and i hope the hardy boys will be looking for the tag team gold..

backstage..as jeff and matt are coming to the backstage area.the highlander comes face to face with the hardy boys.

Highlanders:congratulation on your victory over the tag team champions.but dont think for a sec that your the only team that has their eyes on the tag team gold.we are also looking forward to win the tag team gold against ssquad but we didnt have got a chance to fight for the tag titles.

Hardy's:we prove our selves to be the no.1 contender's alright and if you guyz want the tag team gold so you have to wait because right now its our time and this time we will get the tag team gold and no one cans top us from becoming the tag team champions.

Highlanders:since when did you won the no.1 contender's match huh??you guyz got a chance to become the tag team champions last night at summerslam but you guyz lost so take a step back and let us be the 1 to face the ssquad.

Hardy'sh is that so...so if you scotlander's have got the guts meets us next week in the ring in a tag team match for the no.1 contender's for the tag titles.what you say highlander's.

Highlanders:we accept..see you next week hardy boys.

Jr:what a match has been made king.will we really see a no.1 contender's tag team match for the tag titles next week.
King:jr you heard it right but its not the hardy's or the highlander's who book the matches,its vince mcmahon who book the matches.so we have to wait next week to find out.

backstage:vince is shown and he tells that coming up next is the 1st draft pick from smackdown.and to do the honours it will be my son shane o mac who will call out the 1st draft pick right in the middle of the ring.

shane:dad why dont you go with me also.i mean we both will go to the ring and call out the 1st draft pick from smackdown.

vince:look shane i wont go out there again.i mean if i go to that ring again tonight,so dx will again show up doing some foolish thing on me which i dont want to.so you go to the ring and let daddy rest here and have some fun with the lady that will be here in any moment.

shanek cool dad but who is the lady dad.

vinceooh shane you dont have to worry about that.leave it to daddy who ever she is.now go out there and do your job..thats my boy.

shane comes to the ring.
shane:as you all know why im here.so let me call out the 1st person who is drafted to raw from smackdown.come out who ever it is.maria music hits.she come to the ring.
Shane:what the hell are you doing here..are you drafted from smackdown.

Maria:noo shane.actually the reason im out here is because i wanted to do the honour's of calling out the 1st ever draft pick from smackdown.so shane can i please do the honour's if you dont mind..maria flirting with shane.

Shane:woooo.well maria go on and call out the 1st draft pick from smackdown.

Maria:thanks shane.hello guyz how are you all doing tonight.(maria telling to the fans)so guyz who do you think it is going to be.any guesses.
Crowd:Batista-JBL-Lashley-Kennedy-Boogeyman-King Booker

Maria:wel lets see who is it..ladies and gentlemen please welcome the 1st draft pick from smackdown.

Kurt Angle music hits as the crowd goes nutss..out comes k.angle
K.angle:thank you guyz for the lovely welcome.and thanks maria for the introduction as angle shake maria hands.maria leaves as shane also leaves.
K.angle:its great to be back on raw.last night i had a chance to become the world h.champion but because of benoit i couldnt get the job done.so as im drafted to raw which is good news for benoit.so here on raw next week i will call out the wwe champion and challenge him to a match...angle leaves

JR:my god what a draft pick king.k.angle comes out here and makes a huge announcement and next week he will challenge edge our raw champion for a match.that is a huge draft pick for raw.
king:i dont believe this jr.angle on raw.now we would really see some real action wrestling from angle and i cant wait for next week jr..angle calling out edge that would be great..

5)umaga vs jobber
winner:umaga...Armando take the mic and speaks..
Armando:everybody listen to me my name is Armando Alejandro Eeesstrrrraaada.hahaha.no one can beat my samoa bulldoser.umaga has been undefeated since his debut match.so next week i issue a open challenge to anyone who can beat umaga to a match.one on one.

JR:what next week Armando issues a open challenge to anyone to beat umaga to a one on one match.who will take such a challenge king.no one wants to face umaga.he is a animal.

King:jr i think you are right.no one wants to face a man like umaga.he's crazy he can do anything to you..lets see what happens next week who will accept the challenge.

Jr:up next is our main event.and vince said he will announce a new raw gm who is it going to be or do we have to wait next week for the newgm as well king.

King:be patient jr.the night is not over we still have a last match and i hope vince announces the new gm tonight.

are you ready hits as dx makes their way out to a huge cheer by the crowd
cena comes out to a good cheer as well.

here comes our wwe champion edge with the lovely lita and the crowd are boooing him.
randy music hits as he comes out to a descent boooos from the crowd.
here comes the 500pound bigshow.the crowd is boooooing him big time..

6 man normal Tag Team Match
6)HHH-HBK-CENA vs EDGE-ORTON-B.SHOW
finish:all the 6 stars are in the ring fighting each other as the Glass Shatters
outcomes Stone Cold Steve Austin in his shorts and t-shirt.
austin comes to the ring and stunner all the heel team..bigshow-orton-edge
and then austin stunner cena as well..hhh-shawn are looking to each other and looking to austin as well...at this moment the whole crowd is silent..3 men loooking at each other..and all 3 of them has a smile on their face it looks like dx has all planned this.austin-hhh-hbk smiling at each other as dx does their dxchops and austin asks for beers and the crowd is on their feet as we all think austin has joined dx..austin throws a beer can to hhh and shawn.they all cheer to the can and as hhh looks backward to the crowd and austin just stunners shawn and austin standing behind hhh and showing him the middle finger as hhh looks back and gets stunner by austin..

JR:my god king.austin just stunner all the 6 superstars and why did austin come back...

King:austin coming for the entrance ramp stunning all the wrestlers and now wht.what is austin poin.he's still in the ring taunting to the crowd

No chance in hell hits the ring and here comes vince and shane o mac to the ring..vince and shane is looking serious and vince say to austin.

vince:what in the hell are you doing here.who called you back???

Austin:you really want to know vince who called me back huh?

vince:let me answer that one for you austin:

vince:i called you back and ladies and gentle men here is your new General Manager of Raw"STONE COLD STEVE AUSTIN"as vince hugs austin and the show goes off the air..

ryu

guyz im anxiously waiting for your opinions and comments about my show.and please guyz a small request rate my show.true opinions will be appreciated.thanks..i just cant wait to hear the opinions of you guyz.

edge-O-Matic

its review 4 review.

ryu

WWE smackdown Results:

Cole:welcome live to smackdown and what a show we will be havibg tonight.
JBL:cole tonight vince will be appearing and will officially announce a new gm.
Cole:now lets start the show:

one one one non title match
1)G.Helms vs chris sabin
finish:helms on the top rope going for the moonsault on sabin but sabin moves out of the way and helms is down and sabin gets up and hits helm with his finishing move the cradleshock.
winner:Chris sabin

jbl:what a great match we just had cole.
colefcourse jbl it was a non title match but still sabin proves that he is looking to take the belt from helms.

tag team match-non title
2)brain kendrick-paul london vs psicosis-super crazy
finish:kendrick and crazy are fighting in the ring as london and sicosis are down.kendrick hits a couple of kicks on crazy as sicosis gets up and attacks kendrick from behind.london gets up and he attacks crazy.kendric and london irish whip both crazy and sicosis to the turnbuckle and 1st lonodn goes for the running splash on crazy-sicosis but they get out of the way and london is out of the ring.crazy-sicosis double team kendrick as carzy goes top the top rope and hits his moonsault for the victory..
winner:super crazy and psicosis

3)finlay vs c.masters(face)
finish:masters has locked the masterlock on finlay as finlay tries to break it but masters has locked it and minutes later finlay is down and masters has won the match.
winner:chris masters

PROMO
4)Batista music hits as the crowd goes nuts for him.batista had some stiches on his forehead.batista enters the ring takes the mic.
Batista:you all have been amazed by what i did last sunday at summerslam.i destroyed the great khali and win the match also.so now i want to move on and what next for me is the world heavyweight championship.so i want to challenge.mark henry music hits and he comes to the ring.

jbl:my god look who's back its the killing machine m.henry.he's back cole and i lov it.
cole:is he totally fit to wrestle.i mena he was injured and we didnt got any news of m.henry returning,this is totally shocking.

henry:batista you are surprised by seeing me here.standing in front of you.i think you have totally forgot about me.let me remember you who i am.i destroyed you and took you out of actions for 6 months.i destroyed angle and sent him out of action as well.i destroyed benoit also.i destroyed the undertaker also.and when you came back after your litle injury you were supposed to have a match with me but i got hurt.

Batista:you didnt got hurt heny.i destroyed you as well and after destroying you then you got hurt.so since we didnt had our match at GAB so what you say do we have our match right here tonight.

Henry:i know dave we have some unfinished business but i cant wrestle you tonight but we will fight on the right-time,right day and on right ppv.yes you heard me we will fight at nomercy.what you say

Batistak thats fine with me.as the match stipulation goes it wont be a one on one match henry.it will be somthing special and i will announce it next week.

Henry:leaves the ring as well as batista after posing to the crowd.

jbl:what a match has beeen booked at nomercy and what is the special match that batista is talking about.
cole:that is really very huge announcement by the both men.next week batista reveals his match against mark henry and jbl they will settle their unfinished business on nomercy.

jbl:i hope henry destroys batista again and sends batista on long vacation again.

5)Sylvester Terkay vs William Regal
finish:terkay just beat the hell out of regal and hits his finish move and wins the match
winner:Sylvester Terkay

one one one match with managers---mnm on the announce table
6)RVD with rey vs Ajstyles with Lowki
finish:rvd on the top rope going for the frogsplash but lowki comes in and throws rvd down to the mat as rey was distractted with the refree.aj does his finishmove as lowki attacks rey from behind and back in the ring aj gets the win
winner:ajstyles and lowki.after the match mnm enters the ring as they ambush the tag team champions

PROMO
7)vince music hits as he makes his way to the ring.as you all know last monday on raw your beloved wrestler k.angle got drafted to raw and now its time to see who is drafted to smackdown from raw.so come out who ever it is.

Cena music hits and he makes his way down to the ring with very loud mix reactions.

JBL:what is cena back on smackdown.and who is the new gm.
cole:my god what a draft pick for smackdown.this is very huge pick for smackdown.

vince:welcome to smackdown john cena.

cena:thanks vince and its great to be back on smackdown.i hope now edge can openly walk around the locker room because cena is no more on raw.so without further a duo im looking forward to become the new heavyweight champion.and by the way who is the world heavyweight champion in samckdown.

vince:look cena i dont know what is your plans on smackdown but if you dont mind i have a 2nd major anouncement to make as well and that is the newgm of smackdown.and if you will kindly leave that will be really appreciated so cena leaves and without further a duo please welcome the new GM of smackdown........................................................................THE ROCK

jbl:what the rock.is vince gone mad the rock is a wrestler cole not a gm.what is wrong with vince.

cole:my god this is big news for smackdown the rock back as the gm of smackdown..we got 2 big surprises in 1 night..waht a historical night in smackdown history.

the rock makes his way to the ring and the crowd is gone ballistic they are standing on their feets and cheering for the rock.

therock:thank you vince for giving me this oppurtunity and i will fullfilly do my job as the rock always does.wait the rock forgot 1 thing.
Finally the rock has come back to washington.and next week the rock will make desicions as the new gm of smackdown.as for tonight the rock says relax an enjoy the night.

vince:alright then the rock tonight you do as you like and next week your job starts so take care the rock.

rock:if you smelll....................................................................is cookin!!!
the rock poses to the crowd as he leaves the ring.

one on one match...lashley with ric flair joins jbl-cole
8)m.hassan vs mr.kennedy
finish:kennedy does the swanton bomb on hassan as he is about to pin hassan.ric flair distracts the refree as lashley spears kennedy.hassan with his downwardspiral and pins kennedy for the 3 count.

jbl:what a manager lashley has cole.and what a victory for hassan.
cole:i didnt think lashley will do such a thing but when ric flair is your manager you also get dirty.the dirtiest player .

one on one rematch for the title match
9)Chris benoit(champion) vs Bookert
finish:benoit locked the crossface on bookert as bookert tries to reach the ropes but taps out and benoit gets the victory.
winner:and still champion chris benoit.
aftermatcheadman walking hits the light wents out and its full dark in the ring and benoit is in the ring.lights comes back as undertaker standing behind benoit in his baddass attire.benoit looks back and undertaker connects with the chokelsam and the hand goes up in the air as the undertaker hits benoit with the last ride..undertaker picks the title and take a loook at it and leaves the ring as benoit is laying down with the belt on his chest..

cole:what undertaker is back as the badass.my god what a smackdown we had jbl.
jbl:undertaker is back cole and he is back with tht stupid badass gimmcik.why he attacked benoit and why the hell he took alook at the title....what a smackdown we had.

on the entranceramp:undertaker sitting on his bike gets his hands up in the air as the show goes of the air.

jpate87

i love it

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Nice so far man, I'm liking the last Smackdown!
I would probably give it a 6.5/10 - but if it were in colour etc. it would be much easier to follow, you should look into doing that - but keep it up

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ryu

guyz please i want to know.how am i doing.so far i have posted 1 ppv.1raw and 1 smackdown show.so a review will be great of how am i doing.please guyz i really want to know your opinions as i know you guyz are the best bookers around here.so a little help from you guyz would be great.thank you and from tomorow i will post raw on monday and smackdown on friday.since it was my first time thats why i got it lil messed up by posting raw on wednesday..so from tomorow it will be all good and i hope you all could give me your opinion about my btb.thanks again.

jpate87

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