View Poll Results: How is my BTB so far

**TKoW** · 10-20-2006, 05:06 PM

TKoW's review of Unforgiven:

-REALISM:
I don’t like the idea of Eugene vs. Sandman for the Hardcore Championship. It just wouldn’t work. Apart from that all other matches were believable and realistic. I think a lot of people are into this “Orton joins nWo, Carlito joins D-X” idea. I personally don’t agree with it, but if the nWo was to come back it could happen. Edge, Christian and Lita sounds good but I don’t think it’d work on paper. Also, do you think that Hogan would really lie down for D-X? I don’t think so. I think Nash or Big Show should’ve got pinned. Overall, the PPV was good in this category:

7/10

-LENGTH:
Length was acceptable, but I feel it could’ve been longer. Try to organise your work and try to write matches from start to finish when it comes to PPV. I believe this is your first PPV so I won’t be too harsh on you, but if you don’t improve by your next show I will be:

8/10

-QUALITY/ENTERTAINMENT:
To be honest I haven’t read this thread from the beginning so I wasn’t very aware of the storylines. What you could do is recap (in a sentence each) what happened each week leading up to the PPV before you write a match to keep the reader informed.
I enjoyed most of the show, especially the return of the masked Kane

, but there were some points that I didn’t like: Eugene vs. Sandman, nWo-style Randy Orton vs. D-X style Carlito (not the match, just the styles), and Christian being Edge’s lackey. I think for a PPV you did very well:

8/10

-SPELLING/GRAMMAR:
There were many spelling mistakes and errors in grammar, so this rating won't be very high. You need to pay more attention to grammar and spelling. I don't think it's that hard to use the Shift key. Personally I see grammar and spelling as very important, which is why I'm giving you such a harsh rating. Hopefully you can improve:

4/10

-MATCHES/BOOKING:
Booking was a bit all over the place, but could be more organised with time and more attention to planning. Don’t put too many hardcore matches on the same card: (Hardcore Title, Kane vs. Umaga, D-X vs. nWo) were all described as “bloody” or brutal. Try to have a good mixture of speed, power, technical and brawling matches onto the card. Star quality was was OK, but could’ve been improved slightly: Eugene vs. Sandman (sorry to bring this up again!) and Spirit Squad vs. Hardyz vs. Highlanders didn’t interest me that much:

7/10

OVERALL SCORE: 34/50 = 6.8/10

FINAL NOTE: A good attempt for a first PPV, but some improvements can be made. Overall it was OK but now I expect more from you in the future. I am looking for more organisation and better spelling/use of grammar in particular.

ryu · 10-20-2006, 05:13 PM

thanks for the review and i think you dont know. Eugene is not the ab-normal retarted Eugene. in my show he is simple man with a heel status so hope that clears every thing out and basically i had a 5 weeks feud of Sandman-Eugene and at unforgiven it was for the first time they face off each other. and i will try to improve in my next show's.

ryu · 10-21-2006, 04:28 PM

Smackdown Preview: 6th Week

Last week Lowki advanced to the next round of Cruiserweight tournament and in the last match of the 1st round who will be competing tonihgt to advance to the next round.

also last week a angry Batista demand a match from the rock but rock didnt have any space on the card so he refuse to put Batista in a match and later Terkay came out ot the ring to face his unknown opponenet. but Terkay had somthing to say before his match. Terkay expressed his feeling that he is sick of facing jobbers every week and tonight he wants some tough competition as Batista accepted his challenge and had a match with Terkay. in the end Henry came out and helped Terkay to defeat Batista and after the match Henry and Terkay unleashed hell on Batista. what will happen this week. will the Beast be looking for pay back.

also last week 2 former freinds and partners Rvd-Rey faced each other in a one on one match and in the end some inteference from Chavo cost Rvd his match as Rey was not happy about that and after match, Rey checked on Rvd and extended his hand to Rvd but Rvd replied with a kick to the head and left in anger. what will happen between these 3 wrestlers.

and last week Kennedy faced Finlay with Master in Kennedy corner and Lashley in Finlay corner. in the end master helped his partner Kennedy to pick up the win as this week it will be the opposit as Lashley will face Master and their partners will be in their corner.

also last week John Cena beat the holy hell out of BoogeyMan in the backsatge. what will happen this week will the B.Man be looking for revenge or will Cena come up with another ass whoopin on B.Man.

last week it was official that a tag team match will take place as Benoit-Sabin faced Undertaker-Hassan and in the end it was the Champion Benoit-Sabin who got the victory over Hassan-Taker. what will happen this week between a hungry no.1 contender Undertaker and the W.H.Champion

to find out all the answers check out Friday Night Smackdown

ryu · 10-22-2006, 12:42 PM

Smackdown Results ---6th Week

The show opens with the fire works as JBL and Cole opens the show.

Chris Sabin music hits as he makes his way to the ring to face Jamie Noble for the last match of the Cruiserweight Championship match 1st round to name the no.1 contender.

Sabin vs Noble
It has been a great match with some great high flying moves performed by both wrestlers. in the end Sabin gets the victory after Noble misses a leg drop from the top turnbuckle and Sabin connects with the Cradle Shock.

backstage we saw Batista entered the building looked in a very anger mood.

backsatge in Lashley locker room: Lashley was getting ready for his match as Ric Flair pumped him up before his match which was next. then Finlay came in and talked about how Lashely will beat Masters tonight.

Lashley (with Ric Flair-Finlay) vs Masters (with Kennedy) on on one match.
It was a power house packed match between Lashley-Masters. Both men dominating each other through out the match. In the end, Lashley misses a Spear and goes shoulder first into the steel post as Master connects with the Master Lock, Lashley in pain tries to fight back but Master puts more pressure on him as Flair gets on the apron and distracts the reff as Finlay got in the ring and hit Master with the shelaileigh as Kennedy chases Finlay through the crowd. in the ring Lashley recovers and hits the Dominator on Master for the 3 count.

backstage Cena is walking in the backstage as The Rock standing near the food table stops Cena and has a word with him. Cena: Wassup Rock. Rock replies by you low life little thug. Last week you beat the hell out of Boogey Man and now you are walking tall, all proud of your self. Cena replies: B.Man had what was coming to him and Cena replies what will you do about it huh. Rock replies by saying, as B.Man is not here tonight you will face the man, who is looking for some revenge, who has beeen got beaten down 2 weeks in a row by his enemies and im sure he is looking to take out his frustrations on some one so tonight it will be you Cena vs Batista. one on one. Cena does not like that as Rock does his If Ya Smellllllllll! What The ROck Is Coookin!

Chavo vs RVD vs Rey Mysterio in a triple threat match. this match was announced by our gm The Rock.

Through out he match Chavo and Rey has been on the same page as they had beaten down Rvd. in the end Rvd fights back as Rvd throws Rey out of the ring and hitt Chavo with the spinning heeel kick as Rvd goes to the top and connects with the 5 Star Frog Splash as Rvd covered Chavo Rey on the apron hits the springboard Leg Drop on Rvd as Rey pinned Rvd for the 3 count. After the match Rey celebrate his victory as Chavo also joinned Rey but Rey was not happy about it and left as Chavo hit his finisher mover on Rvd as Chavo posed toward the crowd and taunted Rvd then left.

The Cruiserweight Champion Paul Burchill was in action as he fought William Regal in a one on one match.

Through out the match Ragal has been dominating the match. In the end Regal missed a knee drop as Burchill hits some hard kicks to the back of Regal head. Burchill after hitting some of his signature moves then hits the C4 on Regal as he covered Regal for the 3 count.

Batista vs John Cena.

Batista-Cena has locked in as Batista unleashed on Cena by hitting some left and right hands followed by a body press slam. Batista hits a thunderous spine buster as from the back Henry and Terkay comes in and attacks Batista but Batista fights back as Cena also joins Henry-Terkay and beats Batista. all 3 of them are beating Batista as B.Man music hits and Cena is shocked as Heny-Terkay continue their assault on Batista. B.Man comes from crowd as Cena is till looking towards the entrance ramp. B.Man enters the ring and hits Cena with the chair to back as he helps Batista also by hitting Henry and Terkay also with the chair shot. Cena in the ring knocked out, as B.Man gets the worms out of his pocket and throws it all over Cena. Batista slowly gets back on his feet as he stares Henry and Terkay who were at standing at the middle of the ramp and Cena rolls out of the irng after the worms all over his body. Batista looks at B.Man as Batista shook B.Man hands.

up next is the contract signing between the no.1 contender Undertaker and the W.H.Champion Chris Benoit.

Rock is in the ring as he calls out both the superstars to the ring. No Mercy is just 1 week away.

Benoit and Undertaker both in the ring as Benoit speaks first before signing the contract. Benoit: Benoit talks about how he used to respect undertaker and how the phenom Undertaker was the biggest wrestler of all time and Benoit said Undertaker used to be my favourite wrestler untill he became a coward, a pathetic wrestler and a pathetic human being. Undertaker gets of his chair in anger as the Rock tries to calm him as Benoit looks in the eyes of Undertaker and says at No Mercy. Undertaker you will Tap Out and Benoit signs the contract. Now its Undertaker turn to sign the contract. Taker looks in th eyes of Benoit for some time as Taker signs the contract. The Rock: Now its official after 1 week at No Mercy Chris Benoit will face off Undertaker in a one on one match for the W.H.C. Taker grabs a mic and speaks.
Taker: Benoit at No Mercy you will face the devil who will kick your ass and make you respect the phenom, the Undertaker. and after No Mercy the phenom will be standing tall with your title in my hands as i will become the new W.H.Champion and at No Mercy you will Rest In Peace. Benoit replies by saying: You are wrong and at No Mercy Benoit will prove you wrong and at No Mercy i will be still the W.H.C after making you Tap out and you will find out why they call me the Rabid Wolverine and you will find out that Benoit is for Real. as Benoit music hits both wrestlers gets into each other face as they talk to each other as the Rock orders the security to get them away. Undertaker and Benoit steps back as Benoit looks back with the title high in the air as he poses towards the crowd, Undertaker hits Benoit from behind with a clubbing blow to the back. Undertaker stomps on him as Undertaker hits Benoit with the Title. The security tries to stop Taker but Taker takes them out as well and Taker gives Benoit the Last Ride on the the table.
Taker gets the belt as he holds the belt high in the air as the show goes of the air

**H a z a** · 10-23-2006, 05:03 AM

CenaRocksOk'S review of Smackdown:

-REALISM: I saw some good stuff in here it all looked like it could happen so nothing to unrealistic but i saw 1 or 2 things in here. etc. The show ending on a contract signing is unlikely.

8/10

-LENGTH:
Length was okay i mean your writing your shows in a diferent format so it is going to be short but i think you made this work quite well.

7/10

-QUALITY/ENTERTAINMENT:
I am not aware of your storylines so i will need to keep reading to find this out, basically it could of been better say for example i was unaware the main event in this show. Also i am not too happy with the boogeyman in this and i think a clean feud without him would go down better.

7.5/10

-SPELLING/GRAMMAR:
You made youself look like a primary school student man, who the hell is B.man seriously all it takes is a little more effort, a spelling/grammar check would be fine, try to write in full and explain fully what is going on.

5/10

-MATCHES/BOOKING:
Booking was very random, but some of the matches were good such as Cena-Batista although it could of been better if it was a clean match, and to be honest all the mathes that could of worked were not clean endings, improvement could be made.

7/10

OVERALL SCORE: 34/50 = 60.8/100

FINAL NOTE: A good attempt for a first PPV, but some improvements can be made. Overall it was OK but now I expect more from you in the future. I am looking for more organisation and better spelling/use of grammar in particular.

ryu · 10-23-2006, 06:12 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by CenaRocksOK

CenaRocksOk'S review of Smackdown:

-REALISM: I saw some good stuff in here it all looked like it could happen so nothing to unrealistic but i saw 1 or 2 things in here. etc. The show ending on a contract signing is unlikely.

8/10

-LENGTH:
Length was okay i mean your writing your shows in a diferent format so it is going to be short but i think you made this work quite well.

7/10

-QUALITY/ENTERTAINMENT:
I am not aware of your storylines so i will need to keep reading to find this out, basically it could of been better say for example i was unaware the main event in this show. Also i am not too happy with the boogeyman in this and i think a clean feud without him would go down better.

7.5/10

-SPELLING/GRAMMAR:
You made youself look like a primary school student man, who the hell is B.man seriously all it takes is a little more effort, a spelling/grammar check would be fine, try to write in full and explain fully what is going on.

5/10

-MATCHES/BOOKING:
Booking was very random, but some of the matches were good such as Cena-Batista although it could of been better if it was a clean match, and to be honest all the mathes that could of worked were not clean endings, improvement could be made.

7/10

OVERALL SCORE: 34/50 = 60.8/100

FINAL NOTE: A good attempt for a first PPV, but some improvements can be made. Overall it was OK but now I expect more from you in the future. I am looking for more organisation and better spelling/use of grammar in particular.

thanks for the review and bro to answer some of your questions. if you see my last show's, they all were written in full and i got really tired by writing full show's twice in a week and last week after writing 2 full show's then i wrote my Unforgiven ppv als the next day so it was very hard for me to write full show's 2 or 3 times a week. so i decided to recap both show's for some time as i will write the ppv's in full.

why did you said a good attempt for a first ppv. this was smackdown and did you read my Unforgiven ppv also. once again thanks

Dx5221992 · 10-23-2006, 05:06 PM

Sabin vs. Noble - could have been a good match if it was more detailed.

Lashley vs. Masters - Like you said a power house type matchup! Glad to see Lashley pickup the victory.

Triple Threat - good match, i wonder what is going threw rey's mind?

regal vs. burchill - kinda boring but good rivalry glad to see he retiained.

batista vs cena - match of the night what a hell of a match ppv material!

Contract signing - great way to build up an already great rivalry.

overall: 7/10 just because is was really short

ryu · 10-23-2006, 05:22 PM

thanks for your review and it was a recap and that's why the show was short.

**H a z a** · 10-23-2006, 05:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ryu

why did you said a good attempt for a first ppv. this was smackdown and did you read my Unforgiven ppv also. once again thanks

i had copied and pasted the review template from the other guys Unforgiven review and forgot too delete that bit.

Dx5221992 · 10-23-2006, 05:36 PM

hey im going to review raw nd unforigven in 1 hour cuz i have to go somewhere but i will wen i get back thanks

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