Firstly, this is the first time I've checked you show, you've reached the five page mark so you've made it to my good books, you've stuck to it and you earned my respect.
Firstly, The opening was way too quick, you should slow it down and have the commentators introduce the show, it bring's you into the show nicely and give you a small preview of what will happen later on in the processions of the show (to see what I mean check my latest RAW*)
Moving on, would have been better if Bret had come out to the ring for his interview, I don;t recall many wrastlin show's opening up with a backstage segment, unless it's something quick, like I did for Bad Blood in RoG, but you'll get around these thing's as you progress through your writing.
On to some positive, a nice interview with Bret Hart, seemed very shootish, which is good, show's Bret's not an official character, he's out for revenge and it seems he's a tweener with the crowd, nice way to go about it. Nice refereances there to Bulldog, Owen and Stu (R.I.P to thier souls). Me think's Bret is pissed off....
Okay, so I have to bite my tongue, but I honestly thought that it was the bieginning of your show (refer to above), but then you got to the beginning. IMO no way that should have happened, it was a good interview, but it should have at least been after the first match (for backstage) or an opening if he came to the ring.
Opening still seemed a little rushed, should slow it down a little, some nice matches booked too.
Nice opening match, I'm not one for reading the whole match but I scanned through it, not bad I'll say. Nice ending with Eugene screwing Tajiri and Regal, didn;t see it comming, is he a new member to a Axis Power (nice name too). King seemed a litte off with his commentary at this spot, JR was right on though, King needs a little work.
Nice little segment between Shelton and Orton, setting up nicely thier match at Global Warning, Heyman was a little off, but with time you'll get into the characters.
I'll give you a tip: Say what's being said in you promo and think of the character saying it, if it doesn't sound right. Work your promo's to the character, not the character to the promos.
Love the way you list the commercials that appear, I might give that a go one day..... But it's hard since i have no idea what American Commercial's are let alone what they would be on Spike etc.
LOL, nice spot with JR and King with the sponsers:
Quote:
JR: Also by the new Coca-Cola Lime flavor. You put the lime in the coke, you nut!.
King: Your the nut, JR!
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Triple H, right on with the character mate. Can't pick a thing off with Triple H, especially with him bragging about how good he is, nice trip down memory lane, I don't know wheather that shot at 'Jack' was hinted at Foley but it was good if you did (speaking of HIAC, Triple H has had Foley around for 2 HIAC, thats why.)
However, going into Global Warming this Sunday I think H and Jericho should definatly been hyped more, feud seems a little dull as of the moment. Something to think of for Horizon.
Very nice feud building in that Tag match, very very nice. You nicely approached the way of Orton and Shelton, but I really liked the Kurt / Shamrock segment, that was great especailly with Shamrock being passed out during the Ankle Lock, pure greatness.
Batista seems fired up
Nice little segment there with HBK, that went down well, I think I know who it is.
LMAO = Mr. ECW, that was great.... I love this heel Bret....
Okay, now I'm confused about who attacked HBK, I'm starting to think he was framed, especially with the glasses being there, definatly something sus going on here. Could it be that HBK is playing dead?
Nice ending to the Main Event, Triple H and Jericho is starting to come together now, I take back what I said before.
One major floor I found was that HBK was back up and fighting at being completely KO'd from earlier. I but suppose it ain;t too bad. The war is on again, NICE!!!
Nice Show, few mistakes and a couple of thing's I didn;t really like. I'm not a fan of number, but I hope you found the reply good to work from.
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